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Healthcare should always be funded by government, and would always be free for people to use. How far do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

Healthcare should always be funded by government, and would always be free for people to use. How far v. 1
Nobody can deny that a free health care system wholly funded by the government can be responsible for an all-round welfare of people in nation extent. However, it seems to me that there is a impractical issue to reach all of people who admire the idea. The main obstacle is an inflexible requirement of balance between taxpayer who need to fund this health care budget and demand for recipients of this operation, resulting amount of investment from authorities more restricted and declined. For this reason, it might be said that some countries where is not capable of overcoming an intolerable high cost of treatment and ambulance performance are claimed that consistent fluctuation of economic condition is dominating for long-term, and thus notoriously affect their population age and index of satisfaction. A further issue related to an overwhelming expenditure of modern medicine, which is itself makes more possible consumption due to the progressive growth of qualification, especially in some states where older people are prevailing. One final point against this proposal is the added issue of globalization, meaning that immigrants of overseas can move freely, and thus influence negatively in their adopted country's politics and financial circumstances by ameliorating health-based policy. Admittedly, I agree with those who support the argument that professional medical organization is a worthy ambition for a country, and it is necessary to achieve this goal. However, this aspiration will apparently suffer to some extent when confront with practice in real life. To summerize, it is reasonable that no matter how essential to people publicized health-related organs are, this needs to contribute by the way rediscover other types of insurance such as private choice.
Nobody can deny that a free health care system wholly funded by the
government
can be responsible for an all-round welfare of
people
in nation extent.
However
, it seems to me that there is
a
impractical issue to reach all of
people
who admire the
idea
.

The main obstacle is an inflexible requirement of balance between taxpayer who need to fund this health care budget and demand for recipients of this operation, resulting amount of investment from authorities more restricted and declined.
For this reason
, it might
be said
that
some
countries where is not capable of overcoming an intolerable high cost of treatment and ambulance performance
are claimed
that consistent fluctuation of economic condition is dominating for long-term, and
thus
notoriously
affect their population age and index of satisfaction. A
further
issue related to an overwhelming expenditure of modern medicine, which is itself
makes
more possible consumption due to the progressive growth of qualification,
especially
in
some
states where older
people
are prevailing. One final point against this proposal is the
added
issue of globalization, meaning that immigrants of overseas can
move
freely
, and
thus
influence
negatively
in their adopted country's politics and financial circumstances by ameliorating health-based policy.

Admittedly
, I
agree
with those who support the argument that professional medical organization is a worthy ambition for a country, and it is necessary to achieve this goal.
However
, this aspiration will
apparently
suffer to
some
extent when confront with practice in real life.

To
summerize
, it is reasonable that no matter how essential to
people
publicized health-related organs are, this needs to contribute by the way rediscover other types of insurance such as private choice.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Healthcare should always be funded by government, and would always be free for people to use. How far v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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