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he way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make? Has this been a positive or negative development? v.1

he way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make? Has this been a positive or negative development? v. 1
Different people have separate views on how to save the flora and fauna. The politicians who govern the country make rules to conserve natural resources. Although, citizens should follow the rules and keep pushing the ruling party to make new laws against the depletion of natural resources. In history, it has been a debate that who has the most responsibility to entertain the conservation of the environment. There were various factors to decide it. Firstly, the government should introduce new laws which ensures that people do not harm their surroundings. For example, recently, one of the law which has been introduced is to ban the plastics. It leads plastic usage reduction by 70 percent, which is a huge amount in a country like India. All the big vendors have immediately started to follow the order, otherwise have to pay huge fines. Secondly, each citizen should feel responsible so that they should not hurt it. There are many ways in which a person can help reduce it. For instance, they should throw their garbage in such a way that it can be recyclable. Moreover, they can also educate other people to be more eco-friendly by not using products which affect flora and fauna. Usage of CFC (Chlorofluorocarbons) can be reduced by not using cars which use refrigerant as an agent to cool down car engine. In conclusion, it is the duty of both people and government to curb the destruction of natural deposit. Moreover, it is a national who can actually make the difference. They can also push the government to make new laws and fight together for a new world. In this way we can make the earth green and prosperous.
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have separate views on how to save the flora and fauna. The politicians who govern the country
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make
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rules
to conserve natural resources. Although, citizens should follow the
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rules
and
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keep
pushing the ruling party to
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make
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new
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laws
against the depletion of natural resources. In history, it has been a debate that who has the most responsibility to entertain the conservation of the environment. There were various factors to decide it.

Firstly
, the
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government
should introduce
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new
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laws
which ensures that
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people
do not harm their surroundings.
For example
, recently, one of the
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law
which has
been introduced
is to ban the plastics. It leads plastic usage reduction by 70 percent, which is a huge amount in a country like India. All the
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big
vendors have immediately
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started
to follow the order,
otherwise
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have to
pay huge fines.

Secondly
, each citizen should feel responsible
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so
that they should not hurt it. There are
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many
ways in which a person can
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help
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reduce
it.
For instance
, they should throw their garbage in such a way that it can be recyclable.
Moreover
, they can
also
educate other
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people
to be more eco-friendly by not using products which affect flora and fauna. Usage of CFC (Chlorofluorocarbons) can be
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reduced
by not using cars which
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use
refrigerant as an agent to cool down car engine.

In conclusion
, it is the duty of both
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people
and
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government
to curb the destruction of natural deposit.
Moreover
, it is a national who can actually
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make
the difference. They can
also
push the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
to
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make
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new
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laws
and fight together for a
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new
world. In this way we can
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make
the earth green and prosperous.
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IELTS essay he way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make? Has this been a positive or negative development? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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