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Some scientists think that there are intelligent forms on other planets and messages should be sent to contact them. Other scientists think that it is a bad idea and would be dangerous. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some scientists think that there are intelligent forms on other planets and messages should be sent to contact them. Other scientists think that it is a bad idea and would be dangerous. v. 1
Our human race has found the answer for a lot of questions with the help of science, but still there are lots of unanswered questions, even with the feet of technology we achieved so far we try to look for intelligent life form in any planet or stars or even the moons of the plants in our solar systems for different scientific reasons lets focus on the contradictions involve in this subject. Firstly there are evidence found in the nearby planets which leads to doubt that there could be another life form living in the shadows in seclusion in addition to that some rocks are damaged in the nearby planets using machinery which proves that we humans neither found the technology to drill the rocks in the nearby planets nor the resources this raises the answer to the questions that aliens exist and they are not in our reach they hide and they possess some advanced technology to move to another planet if we humans establish contacts we could utilize the science behind their technology to resolve problems we have on earth. However on the other hand there are experts who strictly suggest that establishing contact with another intelligent life form will not be a best option because we humans aren’t prepared enough to face the consequences if the contact goes wrong we simply don’t possess the technology handle the adversary what if the aliens have a motive to invade our planet we may be inviting the danger to our door step "curiosity killed the cat" secondly we don’t know much about their technology we just found footages of the aftermath destruction of the uninhabited planets they are experimenting what if our earth falls in the crossfire of their experiment, anything could happen. Summing up all the events under discussion its best to remain progressing on studying the things around us in this cosmic journey and keep pushing our limits to improve our technology for providing solutions to our earthly problems on our own that may be the best option to stick to the survival of our race we can’t expect aliens to be humans.
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the answer for
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a lot of
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help
of science,
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still
there are lots of unanswered questions, even with the feet of
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technology
we achieved
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so
far we try to look for intelligent life form in any
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planet
or stars or even the moons of the plants in our solar systems for
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different
scientific reasons
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lets
focus on the contradictions involve in this subject.

Firstly
there are evidence
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found
in the nearby
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planets
which leads to doubt that there could be another life form living in the shadows in seclusion
in addition
to that
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some
rocks
are damaged
in the nearby
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planets
using machinery which proves that we
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humans
neither
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found
the
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technology
to drill the rocks in the nearby
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planets
nor the resources this raises the answer to the questions that aliens
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exist and
they are not in our reach they
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hide and
they possess
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some
advanced
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technology
to
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move
to another
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planet
if we
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humans
establish contacts we could utilize the science behind their
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technology
to resolve problems we have on earth.

However
on the other hand
there are experts who
strictly
suggest that establishing contact with another intelligent life form will not be
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a
best option
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because
we
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humans
aren’t prepared
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enough
to face the consequences if the contact goes
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wrong
we
simply
don’t possess the
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technology
handle the adversary what if the aliens have a motive to invade our
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planet
we may be inviting the
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danger
to our door step
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curiosity killed the cat
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secondly
we don’t know much about their
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technology
we
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found
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footages
of the aftermath destruction of the uninhabited
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planets
they are experimenting what if our earth falls in the crossfire of their experiment, anything could happen.

Summing up all the
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events
under discussion its best to remain progressing on studying
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the things around us
in this cosmic journey and
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keep
pushing our limits to
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improve
our
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technology
for providing solutions to our
earthly
problems on our
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own
that may be the best option to stick to the survival of our race we can’t
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expect
aliens to be
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humans
.
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IELTS essay Some scientists think that there are intelligent forms on other planets and messages should be sent to contact them. Other scientists think that it is a bad idea and would be dangerous. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
355 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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