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Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define and what factors contribute to achieving happiness? v.5

Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define and what factors contribute to achieving happiness? v. 5
Happiness is crucial for having a meaningful life. As it is not a universal term, it can be fairly challenging for it to be defined, because people do not usually think about what brings them joy as they experience it, but rather after it is over. Although the path towards happiness could heavily depend on the individual, I think healthy relationships and progress towards a personal goal could really contribute to achieving it. To begin with, happiness is relative and temporal. People can have different backgrounds, goals and thinking. Therefore, one sole definition of this feeling cannot be correct. When it comes to personal thoughts, it is still difficult to describe, though, because on the whole people do not consider what makes them happy and what that feels like until this emotion is gone. Only when they deliberately think about it, will happiness possibly become more than just an association with different events in their mind, which is really hard to put into words. Two major steps towards happiness could be being part of healthy relationships and making progress on an individual goal. Firstly, having people to turn to and rely on can alleviate stress and sadness. But most importantly, even if suddenly peoples' whole lives turn around, the relationships they have built can last forever and help them find happiness again. Lastly, working on a goal or a dream and seeing progress could give people the confidence to think that their efforts and struggles actually have meaning and as a result- make them happier. To summarise, happiness may be difficult to define because this word holds a different meaning for many people and the feeling is usually not considered until it is already gone. People need to find their own way to achieve happiness, but trying to forge quality social connections and seeking progress regarding their personal goals could really contribute to this task.
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Happiness
is crucial for having a meaningful life. As it is not a universal term, it can be
fairly
challenging for it to
be defined
,
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because
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people
do not
usually
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think
about what brings them joy as they experience it,
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but
rather
after it is over. Although the path towards
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happiness
could
heavily
depend on the individual, I
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think
healthy relationships and
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progress
towards a personal
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goal
could
really
contribute to achieving it.

To
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begin
with,
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happiness
is relative and temporal.
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People
can have
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different
backgrounds,
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goals
and thinking.
Therefore
, one sole definition of this feeling cannot be correct. When it
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comes
to personal thoughts, it is
still
difficult to
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describe
, though,
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because
on the whole
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people
do not consider what
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makes
them happy and what that feels like until this emotion
is gone
.
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Only
when they
deliberately
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think
about it, will
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happiness
possibly
become more than
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just
an association with
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different
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events
in their mind, which is
really
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hard
to put into words.

Two major steps towards
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happiness
could be being part of healthy relationships and making
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progress
on an individual
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goal
.
Firstly
, having
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people
to turn to and rely on can alleviate
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stress
and sadness.
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But
most
importantly
, even if
suddenly
peoples' whole
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lives
turn around, the relationships they have built can last forever and
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help
them find
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happiness
again.
Lastly
, working on a
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goal
or a dream and seeing
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progress
could give
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people
the confidence to
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think
that their efforts and struggles actually have meaning and
as a result
-
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make
them happier.

To
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summarise
,
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happiness
may be difficult to define
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because
this word holds a
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different
meaning for
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many
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people
and the feeling is
usually
not considered until it is already gone.
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need to find their
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own
way to achieve
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happiness
,
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but
trying to forge quality social connections and seeking
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progress
regarding their personal
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goals
could
really
contribute to this task.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define and what factors contribute to achieving happiness? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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