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Governments should spend money on railways than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement v.1

Governments should spend money on railways than roads. with this statement v. 1
More finances should be allocated by state authorities to construct and maintain railway tracks than roads. I completely agree with this statement, and this essay will discuss why railway should be given prominence over roads. Many railway vehicles are faster than the road driven commuters. . For example the average speed of a train is 150kmph, while cars and other road running vehicles’ maximum speed is less than 100kmph, on a usual road. Majority of vehicles that run on railway tracks are proven to be faster thus, it is obvious that people can reach their destinations quicker than by using road vehicles. This clearly shows that railway commuters do yield more benefits than road vehicles in terms of speed, and therefore it is always profitable for a government to invest on something that improves country’s transportation system. Moreover, these vehicles can accommodate larger number of passengers at once. For instance, a single train can fit the number of passengers of approximately 200 cars. To put this another way, if one train runs it can reduce 200 cars commuting on roads, which inevitably curb the traffic congestion. Less traffic congestion means an improved transportation system which can attract many foreign investors, diplomats to conduct international conferences, and also tourists, thus contributing directly to the economic development of a country. To sum up with, I personally believe governments should assign a higher proportion of their budget to railways, as they provide much significant benefits than that of roads, with regards to transportation.
More finances should
be allocated
by state authorities to construct and maintain
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railway
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tracks
than
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roads
. I completely
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agree
with this statement, and this essay will discuss why
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railway
should be
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given
prominence over roads.

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Many
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railway
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vehicles
are faster than the
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road
driven commuters.
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.
For example
the average speed of a train is 150kmph, while cars and other
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road
running
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vehicles’
maximum speed is less than 100kmph, on a usual
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road
. Majority of
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vehicles
that run on
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railway
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tracks
are proven
to be faster
thus
, it is obvious that
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people
can reach their destinations quicker than by using
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road
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vehicles
. This
clearly
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shows
that
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railway
commuters do yield more benefits than
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road
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vehicles
in terms of speed, and
therefore
it is always profitable for a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
to invest on something that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improves
country’s transportation system.

Moreover
, these
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vehicles
can accommodate larger number of passengers at once.
For instance
, a single train can fit the number of passengers of approximately 200 cars. To put this another way, if one train runs it can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
200 cars commuting on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
, which
inevitably
curb the traffic congestion. Less traffic congestion means an
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
transportation system which can attract
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
foreign investors, diplomats to conduct international conferences, and
also
tourists,
thus
contributing
directly
to the economic development of a country.

To sum up with, I
personally
believe
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
should assign a higher proportion of their budget to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railways
, as they provide much significant benefits than that of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
roads
,
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
with regards to
transportation.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Governments should spend money on railways than roads. with this statement v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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