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Grades (marks) encourage students to learn. v.1

Grades (marks) encourage students to learn. v. 1
From my everyday experience and observation, I can stand that grades are very good indicators of knowledge. For several reasons that I will mention bellow, I believe that grades encourage students to learn. First of all, grades show students' knowledge. If a person gets a high grade on an exam it means that he understands that subject very well. Otherwise, if a student gets a low grade on an exam it means that he does not understand it completely. Personally, when I get a lower grade on an exam then I expected I know that I could be better prepared. So, next time I will spend more time and efforts to fix my lack of knowledge and do my best on the exam. In this case, low grades encourage me to learn more. I try to analyse my mistakes and avoid them next time. Also, I try to arrange my time more effectively. I know exactly that I can do better than that, so I collect all my strength and focus on the incoming exam. It is a new goal or obstacle that one should overcome in order to continue his path. When finally I get a higher grade on an exam I feel satisfaction and I am proud of myself. I think it is a great feeling. I feel stronger, more self-confident and patient. I think these qualities are essential for a person who wants to achieve something and succeed in the future. Second, students have some kind of competition with each other for higher grades. When a student gets a higher grade then another one, the second student asks himself: "Why do not I have this grade? Is it something wrong with me? Is he better than me? " I think every student at least one time asked himself this question. To sum up, I think there is no doubt that grades encourage students to learn, gain more experience, knowledge, be more self-confident and persistent. Moreover, I am sure that these small victories will help students to win and succeed in the future.
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indicators of
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knowledge
. For several reasons that I will mention bellow, I believe that
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encourage
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students
to learn.

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students'
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.
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a high
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on an exam it means that he understands that subject
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very
well.
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a low
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on an exam it means that he does not understand it completely.
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a lower
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on an exam then I
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and do my best on the exam.
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encourage me to learn more. I try to
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my mistakes and avoid them
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.
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more
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. I know exactly that I can do better than that,
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finally
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a higher
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on an exam I feel
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satisfaction and
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it is a great feeling. I feel stronger, more self-confident and patient.
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these qualities are essential for a person who wants to achieve something and succeed in the future.

Second,
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. When a
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asks himself:
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at least one
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asked himself this question.

To sum up, I
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there is no doubt that
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encourage
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students
to learn, gain more experience,
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knowledge
, be more self-confident and persistent.
Moreover
, I am sure that these
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small
victories will
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to win and succeed in the future.
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38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Grades (marks) encourage students to learn. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
345 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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