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Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communications, such as letters, emails, or telephone calls. v.2

Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communications, such as letters, emails, or telephone calls. v. 2
Humankind, through the ages, has undergone many changes from the time when people communicated only face-to-face to nowadays when a person has in use many types of communication means. Some people still prefer to use face-to-face communication despite many other sometimes more convenient ones such as phone, mail, e-mail and fax. I think to continue this essay it is essential to clarify what kind of conversation we are talking about. For example, if people are negotiating it is very important to have a face-to-face communication. It is very important to see during a negotiation how one's opponent is moving, is he nervous or relaxed, what he is doing, etc. Scientists say that the body language and facial gestures can say many things about a person, his strong and weak sides, his traits, manners and even habits. To know what kind of man one is dealing with is an essential aspect in negotiation. Many managers prefer to have face-to-face conversations with the future employees. So, in this case, they see how a person behaves. From the other side, if I need to notify my bank that I am going to close an account I do not want to spend my time driving there, waiting for my turn and talking with a representative. It is easier for me just to call or e-mail them. It saves my time and my bank's too. To summarise, from my opinion all important issues better be discussed in face-to-face conversation. It will eliminate many further misunderstandings and bring only benefits to both sides.
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from the time when
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communicated
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face-to-face to nowadays when a person has in
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use
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types of communication means.
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people
still
prefer to
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use
face-to-face communication despite
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many
other
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sometimes
more convenient ones such as phone, mail, e-mail and fax. I
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think
to continue this essay it is essential to clarify what kind of conversation we are talking about.

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, if
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people
are negotiating it is
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very
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to have a face-to-face communication. It is
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very
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important
to
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see
during a negotiation how one's opponent is moving, is he nervous or relaxed, what he is doing, etc. Scientists say that the body language and facial gestures can say
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many
things about a person, his strong and weak sides, his traits, manners and even habits. To know what kind of
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man
one is dealing with is an essential aspect in negotiation.
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Many
managers prefer to have face-to-face conversations with the future employees.
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,
in this case
, they
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see
how a person behaves.

From the other side, if I need to notify my bank that I am
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going to close
an account I do not want to spend my time driving there, waiting for my turn and talking with a representative. It is easier for me
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just
to call or e-mail them. It saves my time and my bank's too.

To
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summarise
, from my opinion all
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important
issues better
be discussed
in face-to-face conversation. It will eliminate
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many
further
misunderstandings and bring
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only
benefits to both sides.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communications, such as letters, emails, or telephone calls. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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