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Governments should spend more money on railways than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.3

Governments should spend more money on railways than roads. with this statement? v. 3
Compared to roadways, railways can be a better choice for government investments in transportation. I completely agree with this statement and in this essay, I will state the reasons for my view. Despite of the wide spectrum of the means of transport, trains could be preferred compared to the roads due to following reasons. Firstly, railways are more environment-friendly compared to cars. For instance, it is possible to run trains with electricity that can be generated via renewal fuels like hydro- electricity or solar power plants; compared to cars that mostly run on the carbon-emitting gasoline or petrol. Additionally, building better roads could mean that there are more cars on the roads producing more carbon-dioxide and other harmful gases that contribute to the global warming. Secondly, trains are more economical. Although the initial investment in the railway infrastructure could be high compared to roads, in long run it is more economical for the government as the cost is shared among the travelers. Additionally, train routes can be adjusted based on public’s demand to optimize their utility. Lastly, trains are less accident prone and more comfortable and faster means compared to cars. To illustrate, the bullet trains of Japan and Mag-lev trains in china set the examples of the high speed railways built with modern technology programmed to reduce accidents and fine-tune speed limits to reduce travel times. In conclusion, compared to cars, railways are is environment-friendly, economical and safe for the commuters. It is recommended, that governments invest more in public transport that is sustainable as well as offers better return on investment.
Compared to roadways,
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railways
can be a better choice for
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government
investments in transportation. I completely
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agree
with this statement and in this essay, I will state the reasons for my view.

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Despite of
the wide spectrum of the means of transport,
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trains
could
be preferred
compared to the
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roads
due to following reasons.
Firstly
,
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railways
are more environment-friendly compared to
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cars
.
For instance
, it is possible to run
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trains
with electricity that can
be generated
via renewal fuels like hydro- electricity or solar power plants; compared to
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cars
that
mostly
run on the carbon-emitting gasoline or petrol.
Additionally
, building better
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roads
could mean that there are more
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cars
on the
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roads
producing more carbon-dioxide and other harmful gases that contribute to the global warming.

Secondly
,
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trains
are more economical. Although the initial investment in the
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railway
infrastructure could be high compared to
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roads
, in long run it is more economical for the
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government
as the cost
is shared
among the travelers.
Additionally
,
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train
routes can
be adjusted
based on public’s demand to optimize their utility.

Lastly
,
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trains
are less
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accident prone
and more comfortable and faster means compared to
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cars
. To illustrate, the bullet
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trains
of Japan and
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Mag-lev
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trains
in
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china
set the examples of the high speed
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railways
built with modern technology programmed to
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reduce
accidents and fine-tune speed limits to
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reduce
travel times.

In conclusion
, compared to
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cars
,
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railways
are is environment-friendly, economical and safe for the commuters. It
is recommended
, that
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governments
invest more in public transport
that is
sustainable
as well
as offers better return on investment.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Governments should spend more money on railways than roads. with this statement? v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
263 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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