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Governments should spend more money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.8

Governments should spend more money on railways rather than roads. v. 8
In the recent years, transportation has become an important concern for the governments. The question is whether governments should allocate more budget to railways or building more roads. In my opinion, there should be more rail tracks and trains rather than roads. I will amplify this argument by using some suitable examples before drawing a reasoned conclusion. To begin with, the speed of trains is a factor of utmost importance which has led to foster the need of railways. In other words, trains can cover long distances in a short time. It is due to the reason that trains have a clear track and they do not have to face any blockages like automobiles do on the roads. According to a recent research conducted by the Transportation Department of Norway, the people of Norway could able to save 3 hours of their commute due to the trains. Additionally, railways are also contributing several positive effects to the environment. This is to say that adding more trains is resulting in lesser number of vehicles on the road. As a result, carbon dioxide and other toxic gases emitted by the combustion engines, the major cause of the air pollution, are decreasing. The head of the Department of Environmental Sciences in South Wales University, Prof. Jarrett Fisher states in their recent research that adding the number of trains in the railways is ultimately reducing the amount of carbon dioxide and ammonia in the air. To conclude, by analyzing the above-mentioned argument, it can be shown clearly that it presents a solid evidence. Therefore, if governments invest more in railways than roads, it will be a welcome move and ultimately people will enjoy fast and affordable transportation along with a pollution free environment.
In the recent years, transportation has become an
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important
concern for the
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governments
. The question is whether
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governments
should allocate more budget to
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railways
or building more
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roads
. In my opinion, there should be more rail
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tracks
and
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trains
rather
than
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roads
. I will amplify this argument by using
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some
suitable examples
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before
drawing a reasoned conclusion.

To
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begin
with, the speed of
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trains
is a factor of utmost importance which has led to foster the need of
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railways
.
In other words
,
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trains
can cover long distances in a short time. It is due to the reason that
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trains
have a
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clear
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track and
they do not
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have to
face any blockages like automobiles do on the
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roads
. According to a recent research conducted by the Transportation Department of Norway, the
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people
of Norway
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could able
to save 3 hours of their commute due to the trains.

Additionally
,
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railways
are
also
contributing several
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positive
effects to the environment. This is to say that adding more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trains
is resulting in lesser number of vehicles on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
.
As a result
, carbon dioxide and other toxic gases emitted by the combustion engines, the major cause of the air pollution, are decreasing. The head of the Department of Environmental Sciences in South Wales University, Prof. Jarrett Fisher states in their recent research that adding the number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trains
in the
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railways
is
ultimately
reducing the amount of carbon dioxide and ammonia in the air.

To conclude
, by analyzing the above-mentioned argument, it can
be shown
clearly
that it presents a solid evidence.
Therefore
, if
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governments
invest more in
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railways
than
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roads
, it will be a welcome
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move
and
ultimately
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people
will enjoy
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fast
and affordable transportation along with a pollution free environment.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Governments should spend more money on railways rather than roads. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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