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Governments should spend more money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.6

Governments should spend more money on railways rather than roads. v. 6
Some people say that the government ought to allocate more of their budget to rail than roadways. I totally disagree with this statement because trains are faster and more environmentally friendly. Investing in a modern train system will mean that people can get around a country faster. This is because train passengers do not have to deal with the congestion most road users experience and trains can achieve much higher speeds than cars. Therefore, people will spend less time commuting and more time doing something more productive and this will benefit the entire society. For example, the British Government recently unveiled plans to connect cities in the North of England with London via a high-speed rail network and this will reduce commuting times by half, allowing thousands of people in the Midlands to work in London. Locomotives tend to be less harmful to the environment than cars. This is due to the fact that a train can carry hundreds of passengers and this prevents the use of hundreds of internal combustion engines, thus reducing the amount of carbon emissions. If this is repeated every day over many different routes, the reduction in carbon footprint is highly significant. For instance, Ho Chi Minh City will soon open its first underground metro service and this will reduce the number of cars and motorbikes on the road. One of the main benefits to the city will be an improvement in carbon dioxide levels because of the reduction in traffic. In conclusion, the State should divert more funds to railway systems and spend less on road transportation as this will improve journey times and also be less harmful to the environment.
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Some
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say that the
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government
ought to allocate more of their budget to rail than roadways. I
totally
disagree with this statement
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because
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trains
are faster and more
environmentally
friendly.

Investing in a modern
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train
system will mean that
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people
can
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get
around a country faster. This is
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because
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train
passengers do not
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have to
deal with the congestion most road users experience and
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trains
can achieve much higher speeds than cars.
Therefore
,
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people
will spend
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less
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time
commuting and more
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time
doing something more productive and this will benefit the entire society.
For example
, the British
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Government
recently unveiled plans to connect cities in the North of England with London via a high-speed rail network and this will
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reduce
commuting
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times
by half, allowing thousands of
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people
in the Midlands to work in London.

Locomotives tend to be
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less
harmful to the environment than cars.
This is due to the fact that
a
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train
can carry hundreds of passengers and this
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prevents
the
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use
of hundreds of internal combustion engines,
thus
reducing the amount of carbon emissions. If this
is repeated
every day over
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many
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different
routes, the reduction in carbon footprint is
highly
significant.
For instance
, Ho Chi Minh City will
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soon
open its
first
underground metro service and this will
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reduce
the number of cars and motorbikes on the road. One of the main benefits to the city will be an improvement in carbon dioxide levels
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because
of the reduction in traffic.

In conclusion
, the State should divert more funds to railway systems and spend
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less
on road transportation as this will
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improve
journey
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times
and
also
be
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less
harmful to the environment.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Governments should spend more money on railways rather than roads. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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