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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.8

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 8
Many may say, and I agree, that today’s society has almost erased all its borders and soon will become limitless in what concerns travelling for both work and pleasure. Therefor, if this is to happen, then learning a new language is necessary. Nowadays, learning a new language for the purpose of working in other countries seems to become more and more popular. Adults in need of money or, why not, recognition are trying to pursue their happiness far away from home. Also, the heydays of employers looking only for capable people have gone. It seems that today’s employers are looking, not only for multi-skilled employees, but they also want people who know more than their mother tongue. Sooner or later, those who omitted learning more are prone to become jobless. However, to my mind, a new language shouldn’t be learned just for travelling or working in a foreign country. A foreign language should help the learner broaden his mind. By this I mean that the new language should and will allow us to understand more about the world itself, and maybe our ancestor’s ways of thinking and acting. Needless to say, knowing another language will help us when it comes to understanding the human race, because language is the first poem of a country. All of this being said, I believe that learning a different language should be not only for satisfying our physical needs, like money, but also our moral needs, because never before had such a big thirst for knowledge been displayed.
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learning
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for the purpose of working in other countries seems to become more and more popular. Adults in need of money or, why not, recognition are trying to pursue their happiness far away from home.
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more are prone to become jobless.

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language
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learning
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should be not
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The most intimate temper of a people, its deepest soul, is above all in its language.
Jules Michelet

IELTS essay Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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