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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extend to you agree or disagree with this statement? v.7

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. v. 7
It is true that nowadays people travel more and more either by cars, or mass means of transport. From this regard, infrastructure development is needed. Some people claim that governments should invest in railways development, while to my mind, more money should be spent on roads. To begin with, the number of people choosing cars definitely outperforms those, who travel by train. Each day roads are exploited tremendously, as a consequence, plenty of them are destroyed and require renovation. What is more, trains connect mainly big cities, so residents of villages around have to reach the nearest station by car. However, usually, roads on countrysides are in extremely poor condition. For example, my grandparents live far away from a big city and each time they want to do shopping or have an appointment, they have to go by car to the town. Unfortunately, only sand paths are available in their village so it took them a long time to reach the destination. From a shallow perspective, it can be said that it is better to develop railways and encourage people to use public transport because it is more ecological and safer. Of course, car transport is enormously more polluting and less accidents are caused by trains. But it cannot be forgotten, that emergency services use roads to help people and in disturbingly many cases, someones' life is jeopardized when ambulance go too late because of traffic jams or miserable road conditions. To conclude, while car transport is the most popular and convenient mean of transport these days, governments should care about its infrastructure modernization. It is not only to enhance citizen's daily life, but also to eliminate emergency services' delays caused by defective roads.
It is true that nowadays
people
travel more and more either by
cars
, or mass means of
transport
. From this regard, infrastructure development
is needed
.
Some
people
claim that
governments
should invest in railways development, while to my mind, more money should
be spent
on roads.

To
begin
with, the number of
people
choosing
cars
definitely outperforms those, who travel by train. Each day
roads
are exploited
tremendously
, as a consequence,
plenty
of them are
destroyed
and require renovation.
What is more
, trains connect
mainly
big
cities,
so
residents of villages around
have to
reach the nearest station by
car
.
However
,
usually
,
roads
on countrysides are in
extremely
poor condition.
For example
, my grandparents
live
far away from a
big
city and each time they want to
do shopping
or have an appointment, they
have to
go by
car
to the town. Unfortunately,
only
sand paths are available in their village
so
it took them a long time to reach the destination.

From a shallow perspective, it can
be said
that it is better to develop railways and encourage
people
to
use
public
transport
because
it is more ecological and safer.
Of course
,
car
transport
is
enormously
more polluting and
less
accidents
are caused
by trains.
But
it cannot
be forgotten
, that emergency services
use
roads
to
help
people
and in
disturbingly
many
cases, someones' life
is jeopardized
when ambulance go too late
because
of traffic jams or miserable
road
conditions.

To conclude
, while
car
transport
is the most popular and convenient mean of
transport
these days,
governments
should care about its infrastructure modernization. It is not
only
to enhance citizen's daily life,
but
also
to eliminate emergency services' delays caused by defective
roads
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
6
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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