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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.14

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 14
Implementing proper transport facilities to provide the nation is a challenge for any government. Whether a vast rail network or an improved road transport system can better facilitate the transportation of goods and commuters is a never-ending debate. I believe that fast rails are the conveyance of the future because administrators should spend money on building and developing rail networks. On one hand, trains are faster and can carry a large number of passengers and goods at a time. When thousands of cars carry office-goers and students each day in a city, only a few shuttle trains can do the same. Traffic congestion kills millions of work hours per years and costs billions of dollars and it is caused basically by the sheer number of road transports we use every day. According to a report published by the Road Transport Authority in Pakistan, traffic congestion in Karachi city eats up 3. 2 million working hours per day. A vast network of railways is the only alternative to curb the loss. Expanding roads in cities are almost impossible as they must interconnect the existing lanes. Locomotives, primarily use railroads built aside the cities and consume less space. Effectively managed train system does not cause congestion and save time. By considering the transportation of the future, its developed nation subsidies heavily in developing their transport facilities and they invest more in expanding their rail lines. My opinion is government should plan for the future, considering the facilities and impact on the environment, while investing in infrastructure development. As locomotives offer more conveniences than road transports do, it deserves more budget.
Implementing proper
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facilities to provide the nation is a challenge for any
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government
. Whether a vast
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rail
network or an
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improved
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road
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transport
system can better facilitate the transportation of
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goods
and commuters is a never-ending debate. I believe that
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fast
rails are the conveyance of the future
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because
administrators should spend money on building and developing
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rail
networks.

On one hand, trains are faster and can carry
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a large number of
passengers and
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goods
at a time. When thousands of cars carry office-goers and students each day in a city,
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only
a few shuttle trains can do the same. Traffic congestion kills millions of work hours per years and costs billions of dollars and it
is caused
basically
by the sheer number of
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road
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transports
we
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use
every day. According to a report published by the
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Road
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Transport
Authority in Pakistan, traffic congestion in Karachi city eats up 3. 2 million working hours per day. A vast network of railways is the
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only
alternative to curb the loss.

Expanding
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roads
in
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cities
are almost impossible as they
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must
interconnect the existing lanes. Locomotives,
primarily
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use
railroads built aside the
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cities
and consume less space.
Effectively
managed train system does not cause congestion and save time. By considering the transportation of the future, its developed nation subsidies
heavily
in developing their
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transport
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facilities and
they invest more in expanding their
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rail
lines.

My opinion is
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government
should plan for the future, considering the facilities and impact on the environment, while investing in infrastructure development. As locomotives offer more conveniences than
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road
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transports
do, it deserves more budget.
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IELTS essay Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 14

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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