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Governments should make more effort to promote alternative sources of energy. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.1

Governments should make more effort to promote alternative sources of energy. with this opinion? v. 1
Many authorities all over the world already pay attention on developing new resources of energy to replace the old ones; However, it seems not enough hence there are some ideas that they should try harder to encourage producers. In my point of view, i totally support this viewpoint because of some reasons i will mention underneath. our planet is running out of fossil fuels such as coal, gas and diesel in near future, therefore it is incredibly important to find out some altenative sources of energy. as we know nowadays the major percentage of energies which we are using come from minerals, it is really unsustainable growth for any nations or organizations because it will empty soon as predictions of some experts. Generally speaking, a host of political leaders are keeping an eye on this problem and investing for many studys to exploit new energies including sun, tidal and solar. However, not only expensive technology but also unconvenient conditions are two factors which hinder government to access and manipulate new energies in massive scale. As far as we are concerned, the Earth is polluted in many aspects such as air, water, soil. This is because human activities which burn coal, petrol, wood and gas for energy, so these elements end up spreading a massive gas emission which causes green house effect in global scale. Hence, we should take actions to cut down on demands for it. Take deforestation as an example, many regions in the world are detroying forests for fuel, as a result some natural disasters occur frequently such as flash floods or droughts because of lost cover by forests. Having said that, the more effective new energies, the more sustainable lives we can obtain. In conclusion, there are several serious concerns about energy in our era, thus, government should pay more attention on alternative resource of energy to solve those problems.
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Many
authorities all over the world already pay attention on developing
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new
resources of
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energy
to replace the
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old
ones;
However
, it seems not
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enough
hence
there are
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some
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ideas
that they should try harder to encourage producers. In my point of view,
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i
totally
support this viewpoint
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because
of
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some
reasons
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i
will mention underneath.

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our
planet is running out of fossil fuels such as coal, gas and diesel in near future,
therefore
it is
incredibly
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important
to find out
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some
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altenative
sources of
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energy
.
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as
we know nowadays the major percentage of
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energies
which we are using
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come
from minerals, it is
really
unsustainable growth for any nations or organizations
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because
it will empty
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soon
as predictions of
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some
experts.
Generally
speaking, a host of political leaders are keeping an eye on this problem and investing for
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many
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studys
to exploit
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new
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energies
including sun, tidal and solar.
However
, not
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only
expensive technology
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but
also
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unconvenient
conditions are two factors which hinder
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government
to access and manipulate
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new
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energies
in massive scale.

As far as we
are concerned
, the Earth
is polluted
in
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many
aspects such as air, water, soil. This is
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because
human activities which burn coal, petrol, wood and gas for
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energy
,
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so
these elements
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end
up spreading a massive gas emission which causes green
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house
effect in global scale.
Hence
, we should take actions to
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cut
down on demands for it. Take deforestation as an example,
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many
regions in the world are
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detroying
forests for fuel,
as a result
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some
natural disasters occur
frequently
such as flash floods or droughts
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because
of lost cover by forests. Having said that, the more effective
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new
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energies
, the more sustainable
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lives
we can obtain.

In conclusion
, there are several serious concerns about
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energy
in our era,
thus
,
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government
should pay more attention on alternative resource of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
to solve those problems.
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13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Governments should make more effort to promote alternative sources of energy. with this opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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