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Governments should be responsible for funding and controlling scientific research rather than private organizations. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Governments should be responsible for funding and controlling scientific research rather than private organizations. v. 2
Undertaking scientific research is imperative if countries want to progress and compete in a globalized world. However, the funding and controlling of this research remain contentious issues. In my opinion, the government should have the predominant responsibility for these. One of the first issues is the knowledge that we gain from research. If governments are responsible then they are driven by the need to make advances in knowledge in order to improve people’s lives. This is because they are accountable to the public and the research is paid for by taxes. On the other hand, private organizations are driven by profit. This may mean that some research that could be valuable to society may not begin because there is no monetary gain. Another issue related to this is the research process. When the funding for research comes from the same organization that is going to gain from a favorable outcome, there is a strong potential for biased results. Taking drugs companies as an example, legislation usually requires rigorous trials for new drugs that can take many years to complete. The companies have large amounts of money invested in such research and the need for positive results is paramount. It is difficult for a scientist to remain impartial in these circumstances. However, if this is controlled and funded by governments, their accountability means that such conflicts of interest are less likely to occur. On balance, I would argue that although it is not realistic to remove all opportunities for privately funded research, governments should have the main responsibility for the monitoring and controlling of this. Strong checks and balances need to be in place to ensure future research is ethical and productive.
Undertaking scientific
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research
is imperative if countries want to progress and compete in a globalized world.
However
, the funding and controlling of this
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research
remain contentious issues. In my opinion, the
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government
should have the predominant responsibility for these.

One of the
first
issues is the knowledge that we gain from
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research
. If
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governments
are responsible then they
are driven
by the need to
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make
advances in knowledge in order to
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improve
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people
’s
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lives
. This is
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because
they are accountable to the public and the
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research
is paid
for by taxes.
On the other hand
, private organizations
are driven
by profit. This may mean that
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some
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research
that could be valuable to society may not
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begin
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because
there is no monetary gain.

Another issue related to this is the
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research
process. When the funding for
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research
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comes
from the same organization
that is
going to gain from a favorable outcome, there is a strong potential for biased results. Taking drugs
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companies
as an example, legislation
usually
requires rigorous trials for new drugs that can take
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many
years to complete. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
have large amounts of money invested in such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
research
and the need for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
results is paramount. It is difficult for a scientist to remain impartial in these circumstances.
However
, if this
is controlled
and funded by
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governments
, their accountability means that such conflicts of interest are less likely to occur.

On balance, I would argue that although it is not realistic to remove all opportunities for
privately
funded
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research
,
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governments
should have the main responsibility for the monitoring and controlling of this. Strong
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checks
and balances need to be in place to ensure future
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research
is ethical and productive.
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IELTS essay Governments should be responsible for funding and controlling scientific research rather than private organizations. v. 2

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  American English
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281 words
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