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Governments should be responsible for funding and controlling scientific research rather than private organisations. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Governments should be responsible for funding and controlling scientific research rather than private organisations. v. 1
I believe that the official authorities who run the democracy should pay more attention to scientific exploration and their development. Scientific research are roots of any country to grow in all the means. The reason behind it is because when scientific research will grow, they shall get new technology which will make our country not only famous but earn from its discoveries. Surely scientific research will need financial support in order to make various findings. But many a times it is noticed that the government sponsors more on other ancillary things than on scientific research. The accountability of the official authorities does not end by only financing but also taking an initiative to regulate the scientific research. Giving more importance to scientific investigation than the individuals is indeed a need of an hour. This is perhaps only because of the growing competition. According to me the private institutions do not actually require sponsorships from the government as the benefit of their growth is limited to themselves at times. Moreover, these firms are already supported by many of the individual partners. I think that in this kind of competitive world every nation should be answerable for funding and controlling scientific research as once the scientific research grows subsequently the income at the national level of each country shall increase. I opine that to lead someone or some tribe, the country will have to pay more attention towards their accountability for funding and regulating the scientific research. Therefore, to recapitulate the individual offices will not make much difference in uplifting the nation. But certainly if the scientific research is supported and managed in a good manner, then that nation can lead other nations who will then follow them for growing.
I believe that the official authorities who run the democracy should pay more attention to
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scientific
exploration and their development.
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Scientific
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research
are roots of any
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country
to grow in all the means. The reason behind it is
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because
when
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scientific
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research
will grow, they shall
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get
new technology which will
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make
our
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country
not
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only
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famous
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but
earn from its discoveries.

Surely
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scientific
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research
will need financial support in order to
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make
various findings.
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But
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many
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a times
it
is noticed
that the
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government
sponsors more on other ancillary things than on
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scientific
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research
. The accountability of the official authorities does not
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end
by
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only
financing
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but
also
taking an initiative to regulate the
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scientific
research.

Giving more importance to
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scientific
investigation than the individuals is
indeed
a need of an hour. This is perhaps
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only
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because
of the growing competition.

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According to me
the private institutions do not actually require sponsorships from the
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government
as the benefit of their growth
is limited
to themselves at times.
Moreover
, these firms are already supported by
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many
of the individual partners.

I
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think
that in this kind of competitive world every
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nation
should be answerable for funding and controlling
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scientific
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research
as once the
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scientific
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research
grows
subsequently
the income at the national level of each
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country
shall increase.

I opine that to lead someone or
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some
tribe, the
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country
will
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have to
pay more attention towards their accountability for funding and regulating the
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scientific
research.

Therefore
, to recapitulate the individual offices will not
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make
much difference in uplifting the
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nation
.
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But
certainly
if the
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scientific
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research
is supported
and managed in a
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good
manner, then that
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nation
can lead other
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nations
who will then follow them for growing.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Governments should be responsible for funding and controlling scientific research rather than private organisations. v. 1

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
288 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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