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government should spend more on railways than on roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

government should spend more on railways than on roads. v. 1
To overcome the problems associated with the railways, It is suggested that the Government should allocate more budget for developing better rail tracks compared to roads and I completely agree with this idea for two main reasons. I believe that investing more on railways is beneficial in several ways. Firstly, travelling by train is much safer, less time consuming, cheaper and over all environments friendly. For example, my country India, having huge a population of poor and middle class people, and massive traffic congestion problems, highly rely on its railway system to facilitate its dwellers. Every day, millions of daily commuters use this mode for commuting. On the other hand, if the same proportion of people had travelled thought roads, governments would need approximately five times wider roads. Secondly, in developing countries like India, where railways are entirely government undertaking, spending higher in this sector will not only generate more revenue, but also helps the state to facility very large number of people. Lastly, the cost of developing railway tracks is quite high, and this is even higher for making special tracks for bullet trains. These tracks help in making rail travelling safer, faster and reliable. However, overlooking them could be a big hindrance in developing an efficient railway transport system. To conclude, I believe that investing higher does not mean that governments are going to neglect the progress of roads. Keeping in view the vast benefits, I believe that government should assign more funds for the proper functions of railways.
To overcome the problems associated with the
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railways
, It
is suggested
that the
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Government
should allocate more budget for
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developing
better rail
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tracks
compared to roads and I completely
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agree
with this
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idea
for two main reasons.

I believe that investing more on
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railways
is beneficial in several ways.
Firstly
, travelling by train is much safer, less
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time consuming
, cheaper and over all environments friendly.
For example
, my country India, having huge a population of poor and middle
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class
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people
, and massive traffic congestion problems,
highly
rely on its
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railway
system to facilitate its dwellers. Every day, millions of daily commuters
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use
this mode for commuting.
On the other hand
, if the same proportion of
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people
had travelled
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thought
roads,
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governments
would need approximately five times wider roads.

Secondly
, in
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developing
countries like India, where
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railways
are
entirely
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government
undertaking, spending higher in this sector will not
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only
generate more revenue,
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but
also
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helps
the state to facility
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very
large number of
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people
.
Lastly
, the cost of
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developing
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railway
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tracks
is quite high, and this is even higher for making special
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tracks
for bullet trains. These
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tracks
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help
in making rail travelling safer, faster and reliable.
However
, overlooking them could be a
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big
hindrance in
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developing
an efficient
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railway
transport system.

To conclude
, I believe that investing higher does not mean that
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governments
are going to neglect the progress of roads. Keeping in view the vast benefits, I believe that
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government
should assign more funds for the proper functions of
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railways
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay government should spend more on railways than on roads. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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