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Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity? v.5

Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity? v. 5
Every year, there is an incline in crime statistics. One of the major cause is due to bad practices by police department in prosecution process. However, in order to prevent this problem, law and enforcement agencies need to alter current policies and align with latest trends of crime. Primarily, It has been observed that loopholes in current investigation procedure is the burning reason behind it. To explain, even though criminal is caught red-handed, still police department is unable to provide strong evidences in order to prove him guilty in court. As a result, criminals maximum utilizes these flaws of system and once released, they opt the same pathway of crimes again. For example, In Pakistan, Every year 35% of criminals are out of prison due to lack of effective probing from police authorities. Seemingly, current police reforms are ailing in nature so, state authorities need to expand the scope of criminal polices and align them with current trends of crimes. To elaborate, crimes these days are very much diversify and in order to subsides crime ratio, firstly, authorities need to ascertain the cause and opt legislation in accordance. Secondly, stringent polices need to adopt to avoid them in future. Dubai, for instance, had credit card scam very common in 2017-18, after implications of modern and effective measures, crime rate declined significantly. In conclusion, crime rate these days are soaring high. Primary cause of this problem is due to dogged approach of poor interrogation procedure by police authorities but in order to overcome, security departments need to change current practices towards criminal justice and opt updated methods for investigation of latest crimes.
Every year, there is an incline in
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crime
statistics. One of the major cause is due to
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bad
practices by
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police
department in prosecution process.
However
, in
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order
to
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prevent
this problem, law and enforcement agencies
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need
to alter
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current
policies and align with
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latest
trends of crime.

Primarily
, It has
been observed
that loopholes in
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current
investigation procedure is the burning reason behind it. To
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explain
,
even though
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criminal
is caught
red-handed,
still
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police
department is unable to provide strong evidences in
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order
to prove him guilty in court.
As a result
,
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criminals
maximum utilizes these flaws of system and once released, they opt the same pathway of
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crimes
again.
For example
, In Pakistan, Every year 35% of
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criminals
are out of prison due to lack of effective probing from
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police
authorities.

Seemingly
,
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current
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police
reforms are ailing in nature
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so
, state authorities
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need
to expand the scope of
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criminal
polices and align them with
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current
trends of
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crimes
. To elaborate,
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crimes
these days are
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very
much diversify and in
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order
to
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subsides
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crime
ratio,
firstly
, authorities
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need
to ascertain the cause and opt legislation in accordance.
Secondly
, stringent polices
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need
to
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adopt to
avoid them
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in future
. Dubai,
for instance
, had credit card scam
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very
common in 2017-18, after implications of modern and effective measures,
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crime
rate declined
significantly
.

In conclusion
,
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crime
rate these days are soaring high. Primary cause of this problem is due to dogged approach of poor interrogation procedure by
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police
authorities
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but
in
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order
to overcome, security departments
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need
to
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change
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current
practices towards
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criminal
justice and opt updated methods for investigation of
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latest
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crimes
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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