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Government should spend money on adult people who cannot read and write rather than young people. Discuss both views and give your opinion v.1

Government should spend money on adult people who cannot read and write rather than young people. 1
The reasons for studying a new language are questionable. Some, think it is needed just to travel and get a job abroad. Meanwhile, I am of the opinion that there are other aspects of learning a foreign language that can be advantageous for people all around the world. In this essay I will discuss both views. Many believe that knowing the language of the country that you live and work in is needed to communicate in all practical aspects of life and it is required to apply for a job. For instance, a French physician living and working in England has to know English to communicate not only with local patients and nurses, but also to rent an apartment and to buy food at the grocery store. In spite language is key to travel and work abroad, there are other reasons for learning a foreign language. Firstly, to keep up with the advances and evolution in many professions it is essential to study languages. For example, a great amount of medical guidelines, scientific articles and newspapers are written in a different language than ours. Secondly, we need new languages to make new friends online. For example, there are some particular social media platforms which are only in Spanish or German so whoever wants to connect through them has to understand these languages well. In conclusion, whereas the two main reasons to learn a foreign language are working and visiting abroad, I believe it is also needed to keep up-to-date at work and to communicate with friends online. Thus, languages should be taught in every school, university and in job offices as part of the regular program to improve people's job and social skills.
The reasons for studying a new
language
are questionable.
Some
,
think
it
is needed
just
to travel and
get
a
job
abroad. Meanwhile, I am of the opinion that there are other aspects of learning a foreign
language
that can be advantageous for
people
all around the world. In this essay I will discuss both views.

Many
believe that knowing the
language
of the country that you
live
and work in
is needed
to communicate in all practical aspects of life and it
is required
to apply for a
job
.
For instance
, a French physician living and working in England
has to
know English to communicate not
only
with local patients and nurses,
but
also
to rent an apartment and to
buy
food at the grocery store.

In spite
language
is key to travel and work abroad, there are other reasons for learning a foreign
language
.
Firstly
, to
keep
up with the advances and evolution in
many
professions it is essential to study
languages
.
For example
, a great amount of medical guidelines, scientific articles and newspapers
are written
in a
different
language
than ours.
Secondly
, we need new
languages
to
make
new friends online.
For example
, there are
some
particular social media platforms which are
only
in Spanish or German
so
whoever wants to connect through them
has to
understand these
languages
well.

In conclusion
, whereas the two main reasons to learn a foreign
language
are working and visiting abroad, I believe it is
also
needed to
keep
up-to-date at work and to communicate with friends online.
Thus
,
languages
should
be taught
in every school, university and in
job
offices as part of the regular program to
improve
people
's
job
and social
skills
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Government should spend money on adult people who cannot read and write rather than young people. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
7
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