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Government should provide free public transportation facilities 24/7 to reduce the traffic congestion. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Government should provide free public transportation facilities 24/7 to reduce the traffic congestion. v. 1
The traffic jam is the main trouble in most of the developed countries. The multiplication in the population and technology lead to buy vehicles for individual's needs. I moderately agree that establishing free transportation measures would slow down the traffic jam, however, I believe that some other activities also provide the way to decline this issue. On the one side, the main reason for this problem is the huge number of vehicles increased. In the current scenario, the human must travel for different purposes in their country, therefore, the easiest way for them to have own cars, which is more convenient for them to make their move anytime. For example, the survey had been taken in china about mobility sources. The majority of the one prefers to use own automobiles rather than using public transportation so, it can be seen the rapid inclined of individual vehicles tend to traffic crowding. On the other hand, some people argued that department should form 24/7 transit for all the works, but it is not accessible for all the classes because of not all the public transport would affect the government into some extent, they should allocate big amount in their annual budget so, they can make some useful developments in the road structure. Such as can expand the size of the road or else build extra tracks, moreover, construct the flyovers, implements some traffic rules would be considerable and effective. To sum up, up to a certain level 24/7 free transport would be ideal but, If the government focused on other measures that I mentioned above give more efficiency.
The
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traffic
jam is the main trouble in most of the
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developed countries
. The multiplication in the population and technology lead to
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buy
vehicles for individual's needs. I
moderately
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agree
that establishing free transportation measures would slow down the
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traffic
jam,
however
, I believe that
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some
other activities
also
provide the way to decline this issue.

On the one side, the main reason for this problem is the huge number of vehicles increased. In the
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current
scenario, the human
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must
travel for
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different
purposes in their country,
therefore
, the easiest way for them to have
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own
cars, which is more convenient for them to
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make
their
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move
anytime.
For example
, the survey had
been taken
in
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china
about mobility sources. The majority of the one prefers to
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use
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own
automobiles
rather
than using public transportation
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so
, it can be
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seen
the rapid inclined of individual vehicles tend to
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traffic
crowding.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
argued that department should form 24/7 transit for all the works,
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but
it is not accessible for all the classes
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because
of not all the public transport would affect the
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government
into
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some
extent, they should allocate
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big
amount in their annual budget
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so
, they can
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make
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some
useful developments in the road structure. Such as can expand the size of the road or else build extra
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tracks
,
moreover
, construct the flyovers, implements
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some
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traffic
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rules
would be considerable and effective.

To sum up, up to a certain level 24/7 free transport would be ideal
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but
, If the
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government
focused on other measures that I mentioned above give more efficiency.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Government should provide free public transportation facilities 24/7 to reduce the traffic congestion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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