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Government is going to provide free public transportation facilities 24 7 to reduce the traffic congestion To what extend do you agree or disagree v.2

Government is going to provide free public transportation facilities 24 7 to reduce the traffic congestion v. 2
The topic of traffic congestion is a very important concern for society at the moment. The way that providing free public transportation contributes to reduce traffic congestion is one of alternatives. We should start by taking a look at expense that government must need to pay. It is good idea that government provide free public transportations for 24/7. Because it will cause more commuters and citizens to use transportation instead of taking their individual cars and congestion will be reduced. Nonetheless, it would be covered by taxes and if more residents take transportation, expense will increase by chance. Also there is a chance to argue by tax payers. Turning to the second point view, it is helpful to the environment. The environmental pollution is caused by various reasons. One of various reasons can be the cars. For instance, Seoul, Capital city of South Korea, provided free transportation for a day for better quality of air. As result, 2 times citizens used transportation than usual and air pollution improved. Therefore, the government provide complimentary service that public transportations encourage to use public transportation to citizens and will increase commuters. In conclusion, both arguments have strong arguments. The environment is not seen our eyes but definitely benefit every single of us. Therefore, I totally agree with that government encourage to use transportation by complimentary if government provide proper time schedule and can support enough financial.
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transportation
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reduce
traffic congestion is one of alternatives.

We should
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by taking a look at expense that
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government
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must
need to pay. It is
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good
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that
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provide free
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transportations
for 24/7.
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it will cause more commuters and citizens to
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use
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transportation
instead
of taking their individual cars and congestion will be
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reduced
. Nonetheless, it would
be covered
by taxes and if more residents take
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transportation
, expense will increase by chance.
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Also
there is a chance to argue by tax payers.

Turning to the second point view, it is helpful to the environment. The environmental pollution
is caused
by various reasons. One of various reasons can be the cars.
For instance
, Seoul, Capital city of South Korea, provided free
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transportation
for a day for better quality of air. As result, 2 times citizens
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used
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transportation
than usual and air pollution
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improved
.
Therefore
, the
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government
provide complimentary service that
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public
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transportations
encourage to
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use
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public
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transportation
to citizens and will increase commuters.

In conclusion
, both arguments have strong arguments. The environment is not
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our eyes
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definitely benefit every single of us.
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government
encourage to
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use
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transportation
by complimentary if
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government
provide proper time schedule and can support
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enough
financial.
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18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Government is going to provide free public transportation facilities 24 7 to reduce the traffic congestion v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
233 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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