It is undeniable that healthcare is very important but it is can be very expensive. Many people think that government should try to prevent illness by different ways and making sure everyone in their country has a healthy lifestyle. In my opinion, I agree that preventing illness is better than curing it.
On the one hand, the cost of medical treatment can be high so government have to think of ways to encourage people to be healthier. If people are healthy, they will not need medical care so often. Many diseases can be prevented such as obesity, back pain if people have healthy diets, take exercise and give up unhealthy habits such as smoking or eating more junk food. If people can not work or care their family or eve themselves due to illness, this will cost government and taxpayers a lot of money. So, I think that governments should spend money on producing information leaflets or advertising on the television which encourage people to follow healthy lifestyles such as eating plenty of fruit and vegetables, taking regular exercise and giving up smoking. In addition, governments should also reduce environment pollution because this can cause illness and health problems.
On the other hand, having a healthy lifestyle cannot prevent all health problems. Cancer is a disease which are a result of livingin the modern world and which cannot be prevented by a healthy lifestyle. Besides, accidents from work or on the road will also cause injuries which need medical treatment. If governments focus mainly on prevention, there may be less money for urgent healthcare and many people could suffer.
In conclusion, I believe that governments should prodice a balance of prevention and medical treatment, but their main focus should be on prevention rather than cure.
It is undeniable that healthcare is
very
important
but
it is can be
very
expensive.
Many
people
think
that
government
should try to
prevent
illness
by
different
ways and making sure everyone in their country has a
healthy
lifestyle
. In my opinion, I
agree
that preventing
illness
is better than curing it.
On the one hand, the cost of
medical
treatment can be high
so
government
have to
think
of ways to encourage
people
to be healthier. If
people
are
healthy
, they will not need
medical
care
so
often
.
Many
diseases can be
prevented
such as obesity, back pain if
people
have
healthy
diets, take exercise and give up unhealthy habits such as smoking or eating more junk food. If
people
can not work or care their family or eve themselves due to
illness
, this will cost
government
and taxpayers
a lot of
money.
So
, I
think
that
governments
should spend money on producing information leaflets or advertising on the television which encourage
people
to follow
healthy
lifestyles
such as eating
plenty
of fruit and vegetables, taking regular exercise and giving up smoking.
In addition
,
governments
should
also
reduce
environment pollution
because
this can cause
illness
and health problems.
On the other hand
, having a
healthy
lifestyle
cannot
prevent
all health problems. Cancer is a disease which are a result of
livingin
the modern world and which cannot be
prevented
by a
healthy
lifestyle
.
Besides
, accidents from work or on the road will
also
cause injuries which need
medical
treatment. If
governments
focus
mainly
on prevention, there may be less money for urgent healthcare and
many
people
could suffer.
In conclusion
, I believe that
governments
should
prodice
a balance of prevention and
medical
treatment,
but
their main focus should be on prevention
rather
than cure.
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32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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