According to many people, the investment in art liked music and theatre are not a good use of money. They believe that this money can be utilised to fulfil the increasing demand for public services like hospitals and schools. I agree with this statement to some extent. This essay will emphasise on the reasons why both are important to our society.
Our society is built up with various elements. According to few people, some of them may not be that crucial to our existence. They believe that a community needs hospitals with advanced types of equipment and schools with innovative technology for the development of a better society. For instance, a hospital with all the diagnostic equipment’s like computed tomographic scan enables cloches to detect diseases at early stages result in fewer mortalities. Thus, government authorities must invest more finances in these essential sectors to strengthen their basic infrastructure. On the other hand
Despite the above facts, I still believe that field of the arts is also important for a society if not equally. Artistic sculptures created over time to help us to remember our cultured existence. The stories reenacted in theatrical performances enable us to relive the history or feels the emotion of an artist, as we get connected with them emotionally at a subconscious level. Furthermore, the music songs, whether traditional folklore or modern pop songs provide us the relaxing environment and entertainment, within the preservation of our cultural inheritance.
In conclusion, I can confidently state that the government should invest more in public services. However, I do not believe that financial funding for the futuristic section is a total wastage.
According to
many
people
, the investment in art liked music and
theatre
are not a
good
use
of money. They
believe
that this money can be
utilised
to fulfil the increasing demand for public services like hospitals and schools. I
agree
with this statement to
some
extent. This essay will
emphasise
on the reasons why both are
important
to our society.
Our society
is built
up with various elements. According
to
few
people
,
some
of them may not be that crucial to our existence. They
believe
that a community needs hospitals with advanced types of equipment and schools with innovative technology for the development of a better society.
For instance
, a hospital with all the diagnostic equipment’s like computed tomographic scan enables cloches to detect diseases at early stages result in fewer
mortalities
.
Thus
,
government
authorities
must
invest more finances in these essential sectors to strengthen their basic infrastructure.
On the other hand
Despite the above facts, I
still
believe
that field of the arts is
also
important
for a society if not
equally
. Artistic sculptures created over time to
help
us to remember our cultured existence. The stories reenacted in theatrical performances enable us to relive the history or feels the emotion of an artist, as we
get
connected with them
emotionally
at a subconscious level.
Furthermore
, the music songs, whether traditional folklore or modern pop songs provide us the relaxing environment and entertainment, within the preservation of our cultural inheritance.
In conclusion
, I can
confidently
state that the
government
should invest more in public services.
However
, I do not
believe
that financial funding for the futuristic section is a total wastage.
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