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Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. v. 23

Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead.

Different people have different abilities and skills. And whatever a person does is what he or she likes and others have no right to question their likes and dislikes. I don't agree with the statement. Yes, the government is spending money on art, music and theater, but it is not a waste of money. People have lots of hidden capabilities and are able to get it out in certain areas only (for e. g, singing and acting). For a person, to know what they want to be is the biggest achievement at the first page of their career. And being a doctor, nurse, banking and other career, they choose to follow it according to what they like to study, but the skill for music and acting needs a big platform to prove that they got what a musician or an actor should have. On the other hand, people rarely take notes on music and acting, however with the help of the government, people have been able to show what they have. There are lots of programs mainly focusing on music and acting, lots of people have got opportunities and many of them even became celebrities after earning reputation from the big platform of singing and acts. Numerous people who never knew what they wanted to be have got the answers. People, unfortunately, didn't think music and acting could be a career but as after decades, nowadays, at the age of technologies, most of the young people are up to arts where people barely used to fall. If the government will decline to take account of entertainment, for sure, many of them will stay unemployed which will raise problems in the government economy.

IELTS essay Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Different
people
have
different
abilities and
skills
. And whatever a person does is what he or she likes
and others
have no right to question their likes and dislikes. I don't
agree
with the statement. Yes, the
government
is spending money on art,
music
and theater,
but
it is not a waste of money.
People
have lots of hidden capabilities and are able to
get
it out in certain areas
only
(for e. g, singing and acting). For a person, to know what they want to be is the biggest achievement at the
first
page of their career. And being a doctor, nurse, banking and other career, they choose to follow it according to what they like to study,
but
the
skill
for
music
and acting needs a
big
platform to prove that they
got
what a musician or an actor should have.
On the other hand
,
people
rarely take notes on
music
and acting,
however
with the
help
of the
government
,
people
have been able to
show
what they have. There are lots of programs
mainly
focusing on
music
and acting, lots of
people
have
got
opportunities and
many
of them even became celebrities after earning reputation from the
big
platform of singing and acts. Numerous
people
who never knew what they wanted to be
have
got
the answers.
People
, unfortunately, didn't
think
music
and acting could be a career
but
as after decades, nowadays, at the age of technologies, most of the young
people
are up to arts where
people
barely
used
to fall. If the
government
will decline
to take account of entertainment, for sure,
many
of them will stay unemployed which will raise problems in the
government
economy.
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