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Prison is the best punishment for criminals. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

Prison is the best punishment for criminals. v. 2
Today, people will commit different atrocities. In order to maintain law and order in the society, judiciary gives out appropriate punishment. The prompt states that the best way to punish offenders is by remanding them in prison. This essay will discuss why I completely disagree with this statement and, also provide accompanying examples. Admittedly, imprisonment might be the best form of punishment for some criminals. For instance, forgery or stealing. The individual is remanded for a given period of time during which reformation programs are organised. This is done because it is believed that the individual's stay in prison might reform such an individual and consequently become a better version of himself or herself. Thus, in this case, I would agree that imprisonment is appropriate. However, there are situations in which the individuals involved are regarded as criminals by the law, but all that is needed to turn the persons around is some months of community service. In addition, the prison might be too harsh for such a person and remanding them will only make them worse. On the other hand, imprisonment might be too lenient for some other crimes. For example, a serial killer on the loose. There is no reforming such person, therefore, the essence of sending this person to a place where reformation can be achieved would be useless. Instead, he/she comes out to continue the crime. Hence, in cases like this, spending some time locked up is not enough. In conclusion, I absolutely disagree that every criminal deserves to the remanded. While some deserve it, others deserve less or more punishment.
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Today
,
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people
will commit
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different
atrocities. In order to maintain law and order in the society, judiciary gives out appropriate punishment. The prompt states that the best way to punish offenders is by remanding them in prison. This essay will discuss why I completely disagree with this statement and,
also
provide accompanying examples.

Admittedly
, imprisonment
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might
be the best form of punishment for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
criminals.
For instance
, forgery or stealing. The individual
is remanded
for a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
period of time during which reformation programs are
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organised
. This
is done
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because
it
is believed
that the individual's stay in prison
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might
reform such an individual and
consequently
become a better version of himself or herself.
Thus
,
in this case
, I would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
that imprisonment is appropriate.

However
, there are situations in which the individuals involved
are regarded
as criminals by the law,
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but
all that
is needed
to turn the
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persons
around is
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some
months of community service.
In addition
, the prison
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might
be too harsh for such a
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person
and remanding them will
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only
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make
them worse.
On the other hand
, imprisonment
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might
be too lenient for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
other crimes.
For example
, a serial killer on the loose. There is no reforming such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
person
,
therefore
, the essence of sending this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
person
to a place where reformation can
be achieved
would be useless.
Instead
, he/she
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
out to continue the crime.
Hence
, in cases like this, spending
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
time locked up is not
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enough
.

In conclusion
, I
absolutely
disagree that every criminal deserves to the remanded. While
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
deserve it, others deserve less or more punishment.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Prison is the best punishment for criminals. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
9
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 9.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 9.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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