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Giving lectures in halls to large numbers of people is an outdated method of teaching. With the technology available today there is no justification for it, and everything should be done online. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Giving lectures in halls to large numbers of people is an outdated method of teaching. With the technology available today there is no justification for it, and everything should be done online. v. 1
In today’s modern world, some people believe that studying with technology could be a better way to learn. While this may be valid to a certain extent, I think having lectures in an auditorium should be retained as it provides a good learning method. To begin with, many people choose to take an online lesson because they are generally more convenient for learners. The majority of the students suppose that it's saving their time they waste on commuting between home and the college. As a result, the rest of the time couldn’t be enough for them to cover all the lessons. This kind of online platform enables students to access the courses by learning in any situation that is suitable for them. These lessons can be watched while students sitting at home or during their free time. Also, students would be allowed to pause in the middle of these and come back later that don’t miss the knowledge of the lectures. However, I believe that face-to-face teaching method is more effective. First and foremost, students could interact by addressing their issues with the lecturers where there are clarification questions. For instance, a student can ask at any point of time about wondering of the lesson spontaneously. Thus, being able to tackle their problems with the lecturers without delaying support them to understand the whole tasks smoothly. Besides, working in class would facilitate teacher understanding about students’ characteristic and take steps to help them in studying. By doing that, the lecturers would determine their methods to modify in the latest lesson for the sake of achieving the optimal teaching quality. To put it in another way, traditional lectures establish a connection between lecturers and students. To conclude, it can be said that online courses give learners the freedom to learn at a moment convenient whereas traditional lectures provide the opportunity to interact with teachers and virtually irreplaceable. I believe that online lectures cannot completely replace the hall lectures because although it is the platform to construct whole lessons, the comprehensive effect is an effective educating method regardless of the development of online classes.
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some
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people
believe that studying with technology could be a better way to learn. While this may be valid to a certain extent, I
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think
having
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lectures
in an auditorium should
be retained
as it provides a
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good
learning method.

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begin
with,
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many
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people
choose to take an
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online
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lesson
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because
they are
generally
more convenient for learners. The majority of the
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students
suppose that it's saving their
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time
they waste on commuting between home and the college.
As a result
, the rest of the
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time
couldn’t be
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enough
for them to cover all the
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lessons
. This kind of
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online
platform enables
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students
to access the courses by learning in any situation
that is
suitable for them. These
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lessons
can be
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watched
while
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students
sitting at home or during their free
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time
.
Also
,
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students
would be
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allowed
to pause in the middle of these and
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come
back later that don’t miss the knowledge of the lectures.

However
, I believe that face-to-face teaching method is more effective.
First
and foremost,
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students
could interact by addressing their issues with the
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lecturers
where there are clarification questions.
For instance
, a
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student
can ask at any point of
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time
about wondering of the
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lesson
spontaneously
.
Thus
, being able to tackle their problems with the
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lecturers
without delaying support them to understand the whole tasks
smoothly
.
Besides
, working in
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class
would facilitate teacher understanding about
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students’
characteristic and take steps to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them in studying. By doing that, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lecturers
would determine their methods to modify in the latest
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lesson
for the sake of achieving the optimal teaching quality. To put it in another way, traditional
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lectures
establish a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
connection between
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lecturers
and students.

To conclude
, it can
be said
that
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online
courses give learners the freedom to learn at a moment convenient whereas traditional
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lectures
provide the opportunity to interact with teachers and
virtually
irreplaceable. I believe that
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online
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lectures
cannot completely replace the hall
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lectures
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because
although it is the platform to construct whole
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
lessons
, the comprehensive effect is an effective educating method regardless of the development of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
classes.
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IELTS essay Giving lectures in halls to large numbers of people is an outdated method of teaching. With the technology available today there is no justification for it, and everything should be done online. v. 1

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