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Giving lectures in auditorium to large numbers of students is an old way of teaching, with the technology available today there is no justification for it; and everything should be done online. Do you agree or disagree with this statement and give your opinion. v.1

Giving lectures in auditorium to large numbers of students is an old way of teaching, with the technology available today there is no justification for it; and everything should be done online. and give your opinion. v. 1
It is true that in these era, the traditional way of teaching students in huge classroom halls started to lessened. Many opted that educating the students should be done through online for it's convenience especially at this period of advanced technology. In my opinion, I do not agree with this form of learning because of the disadvantages that it can bring in the education of the young individuals. Online teachiing decreases or sometimes hinder the teacher-student interaction with each other. The communication between them is limited because the lessons are presented through computers. Normally, pupils are encouraged to participate in the discussion of the lessons, which allows exchanged of ideas. For example, students are urged to ask questions after the lectures. In addition to this, this allows pupils to a chance to asked clarifications from there instructors regarding parts of the topic, in which they did not understand. Furthermore, online teaching prevent learners to enhanced their socialization skills with other people. Another point is, it has drawbacks in the student's level of learning. Online courses that can be bought in the internet is already recorded. This means that, if errors of information is noticed by the student. It can not be corrected or verification of the ideas is impossible. In contrast with the classroom lecture, the student's are free to voice out there concerns. That is why, schools that still used this method of educating has the best results of exams. Moreover, it also shows that in some study conducted, few students are able to complete and finished the whole course. This can be correlated with the substandard technique of teaching, lacked of motivation to learned by the students, and dissatisfied feelings. In conclusion, Although technology had made great contributions on different sectors in society such as in education, it can not replaced the benefits of conducting a one-on-one lectures. Therefore, learning of students is highly effective when it is done through this strategy than in online teaching.
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these era
, the traditional way of
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teaching
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students
in huge classroom halls
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started
to lessened.
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Many
opted that educating the
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students
should
be done
through
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online
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for it's convenience
especially
at this period of advanced technology. In my opinion, I do not
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agree
with this form of learning
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because
of the disadvantages that it can bring in the education of the young individuals.

Online
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teachiing
decreases or
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sometimes
hinder the teacher-student interaction with each other. The communication between them
is limited
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because
the lessons
are presented
through computers.
Normally
, pupils
are encouraged
to participate in the discussion of the lessons, which
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allows
exchanged of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
.
For example
,
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students
are urged
to ask questions after the lectures.
In addition
to this, this
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allows
pupils to a chance to asked clarifications from there instructors regarding parts of the topic, in which they did not understand.
Furthermore
,
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online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teaching
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
learners to
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enhanced
their socialization
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skills
with other
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people
.

Another point is, it has drawbacks in the student's level of learning.
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Online
courses that can be
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bought
The usual collocation for technology is "on," not "in." It is better to say this: "on the internet".
in the internet
is already recorded. This means that, if errors of information
is noticed
by the
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student
. It can not
be corrected
or verification of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
is impossible.
In contrast
with the classroom lecture, the
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student's
are free to voice out
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there
concerns.
That is
why, schools that
still
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used
this method of educating has the best results of exams.
Moreover
, it
also
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shows
that in
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some
study conducted, few
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students
are able to complete and finished the whole course. This can
be correlated
with the substandard technique of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teaching
, lacked of motivation to learned by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
, and dissatisfied feelings.

In conclusion
, Although technology had made great
The usual preposition for "contribution" is "to". Did you mean "contributions to"?
contributions on
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different
sectors in society such as in education, it can not
The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: "replace"
replaced
the benefits of conducting a one-on-one
Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "lecture"?
lectures
.
Therefore
, learning of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
is
highly
effective when it
is done
through this strategy than in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teaching
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes
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IELTS essay Giving lectures in auditorium to large numbers of students is an old way of teaching, with the technology available today there is no justification for it; and everything should be done online. and give your opinion. v. 1

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4 paragraphs
328 words
6.5
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