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Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience Write at least 250 words v.2

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience Write at least 250 words v.2
Art is considered as the process of deliberately arranging elements in a way that appeal to human emotions. Certain individuals have an opinion that governemnt should not invest money on art instead funds should be alllocated to other sectors. This essay disagrees with this statement mainly for two reason. This essay will firstly discuss that art is not only important for foreign tourist attractions but also a source of income generation. This essay will further discuss that various forms of art such as music and dance are a source of entertainment. Government has the responsibility to preserve the architectural beauty and monuments of a country as they are the mirror reflecting the peiod of glory and struggle of great leaders and rulers of the past. Many international tourists visit countries to view the historical buildings and to participate in traditional activities and events, thus, generation foriegn income for countries and boosting thier economy. To elucidate, India' s main source of income generation is from foreign people who visit this country to perceive and get mesmerized with the diverse cultures and architectures such as The Taj Mahal, Red Fort and so on. Apart from the above mentioned reason, I also believe that various forms of art such as music, cutural events, tradtional plays, dance forms and so on are a source of amusement and stress reliever for people. After spending long hours in offices, meting the deadlines and achieving the targets, people relax themselves either listening to music or watching varied events on television or computer. To elucidate, according to a recent study more than 50 percent of people like to watch movies or listen to soft music in order to relieve themselves from all the burden. To conclude, i vehemently disagree with this belief that money should be utilised in various other fields except art, instead, it is the duty of the political party in power to invest in art of a country as they are not only attract foreigners and bring in foreign currency but are also a source of pleasure activity for the society.
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Art
is considered
as the process of
deliberately
arranging elements in a way that appeal to human emotions. Certain individuals have an opinion that
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governemnt
should not invest money on
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art
instead
funds should be
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alllocated
to other sectors. This essay disagrees with this statement
mainly
for two reason. This essay will
firstly
discuss that
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art
is not
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only
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important
for foreign tourist attractions
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but
also
a
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source
of income generation.
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This
essay will
further
discuss that various forms of
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art
such as
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music
and dance are a
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source
of entertainment.

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Government
has the responsibility to preserve the architectural beauty and monuments of a
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country
as they are the mirror reflecting the
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peiod
of glory and struggle of great leaders and rulers of the past.
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Many
international tourists visit
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countries
to view the historical buildings and to participate in traditional activities and
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events
,
thus
, generation
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foriegn
income for
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countries
and boosting
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thier
economy. To elucidate,
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India&
#039; s main
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source
of income generation is from foreign
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people
who visit this
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country
to perceive and
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get
mesmerized with the diverse cultures and architectures such as The Taj Mahal, Red Fort and
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so
on.

Apart from the above mentioned reason, I
also
believe that various forms of
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art
such as
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music
,
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cutural
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events
,
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tradtional
plays, dance forms and
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so
on are a
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source
of amusement and
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stress
reliever for
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people
. After spending long hours in offices, meting the deadlines and achieving the targets,
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people
relax themselves either listening to
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music
or watching varied
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
on television or computer. To elucidate, according to a recent study more than 50 percent of
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people
like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
movies or listen to soft
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music
in order to relieve themselves from all the burden.

To conclude
,
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i
vehemently
disagree with this belief that money should be
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utilised
in various other fields except
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art
,
instead
, it is the duty of the political party in power to invest in
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art
of a
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country
as they are not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
attract foreigners and bring in foreign currency
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but
are
also
a
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source
of pleasure activity for the society.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience Write at least 250 words v.2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
346 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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