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give opinion. . Nowadays, children spending more time in playing computer games rather than doing sport. Why? v.2

give opinion. . Nowadays, children spending more time in playing computer games rather than doing sport. Why? v. 2
This day, the children spending time a lot to playing computer game than doing sport. In this essay, I completely disagree. It is that give more disadvantage than advantage. For the reasons. In the one hand, from that issue, the children who spending time a lot to playing game, could be advantage. For example, the game which is played from children will be increased the skill English language. the owing to, many type game using foreign language and who also learn English from some game. the absolutely, many benefit when the people who can using game with wisely. Except, learning foreign language thet also learning such as skills to fix action when they have problem and can get many friends from the application. I hope, the children can to using computer game suitable with time and only use in a little time. On the other hand, there is no doubt, the people live can change with many ways became of many children more interesting to playing game than sport. Firstly, the adults can have introverted character, because of they more focus with game of computer. Secondly, the people have stay lifestyles, it is because they prefer shit in in front of computer, and in addition, the computer which is function to playing game online or online have damage to body. The evidences, many people in the would be attack may disaster because of a bad live behavior some people in daily active. I believe, the hebit can change, when the parents always control the children and the children have to make a plan and should to be continue to exercise to get good pattern and active lifestyle.
This day, the
children
spending time a lot to
playing
computer game than doing sport. In this essay, I completely disagree. It is that give more disadvantage than advantage. For the reasons.

In the one hand, from that issue, the
children
who spending time a lot to
playing
game, could be advantage.
For example
, the game which
is played
from
children
will
be increased
the
skill
English language.
the
owing to,
many
type game using foreign language and who
also
learn English from
some
game.
the
absolutely
,
many benefit
when the
people
who can using game with
wisely
. Except, learning foreign language
thet
also
learning such as
skills
to
fix
action when they have problem and can
get
many
friends from the application. I hope, the
children
can to using computer game suitable with time and
only
use
in a
little
time.

On the other hand
, there is no doubt, the
people
live
can
change
with
many
ways became of
many
children
more interesting to
playing
game than sport.
Firstly
, the adults can have introverted character,
because of they
more focus with game of computer.
Secondly
, the
people
have stay lifestyles, it is
because
they prefer
shit
in in
front of computer, and
in addition
, the computer which is function to
playing
game online or online have damage to body. The evidences,
many
people
in
the
would be attack may disaster
because
of a
bad
live
behavior
some
people
in daily active.

I believe, the
hebit
can
change
, when the parents always control the
children
and the
children
have to
make
a plan and should to be
continue
to exercise to
get
good
pattern and active lifestyle.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay give opinion. . Nowadays, children spending more time in playing computer games rather than doing sport. Why? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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