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Getting promotions is one of the biggest drives for people to apply themselves and work hard in the modern workplace. Why do you think people are so driven to get promotion? What other factors influence people to work hard? v.1

Getting promotions is one of the biggest drives for people to apply themselves and work hard in the modern workplace. Why do you think people are so driven to get promotion? What other factors influence people to work hard? v. 1
Nowadays promotions are the biggest drives for people applying themselves and work hard in modern workplaces totally agree with this statement, also beneficial for themselves as well. Why should I agree with this form in mentioned below. If they get succeed in her growth to get more new ideas or Infulncer minds or new innovations as well The extent, people are always wanting to the high salary and good position as well and this two things are always to come with promotion. This benefit is coming with hardworking nature and getting new innovation or ideas. Although modern workplaces are required to extraordinary working knowledge and hard working employees those who have this form of knowledges and nature they always get a promotion or salary higher. In this form of situation have always been one of the competition. And the all workers are competitive humour as well as complete to each other. Who gives the all his effort to get promoted in future also the benefits for companies as well. In promotions are coming then extra skills are also developed in working quality, Although the benefits are getting to companies as well. Who gets a promotion in life they also some other skills develop in her/. Example like one of my friends is working in MNC companies, in this company are given promotions to their employees to work knowledge and hard working. It seems like good Infulncer are always getting benefits in he/she's life In conclusion, promotions are one of the biggest drives for people to apply themselves and get more advantages in his life. Also the best factors influence is getting more benefits in his/her hard working humour as well. That's why promotions give to people's soul better and competitive nature. If they win, they get promoted and get other benefits.
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people
applying themselves and work
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in modern workplaces
totally
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agree
with this statement,
also
beneficial for themselves as
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well
. Why should I
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agree
with this form in mentioned below. If they
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get
succeed in her growth to
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get
more new
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ideas
or
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Infulncer
minds or new innovations as
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well


The extent,
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people
are always wanting to the high salary and
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good
position as
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well
and this two things are always to
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come
with promotion. This
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benefit
is coming with hardworking nature and getting new innovation or
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ideas
. Although modern workplaces
are required
to extraordinary
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working
knowledge and
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hard
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working
employees those who have this form of
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knowledges
and nature they always
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get
a promotion or salary higher. In this form of situation have always been one of the competition. And the all workers are competitive
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humour
as
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well
as complete to each other. Who gives the all his effort to
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get
promoted in future
also
the
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benefits
for
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companies
as
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well
. In promotions are coming then extra
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skills
are
also
developed in
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working
quality, Although the
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benefits
are getting to
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companies
as
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well
.
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Who
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gets
a promotion in life they
also
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other
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skills
develop in her/. Example like one of my friends is
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working
in
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MNC
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companies
, in this
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company
are
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given
promotions to their employees to work knowledge and
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hard
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working
. It seems like
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good
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Infulncer
are always getting
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benefits
in he/she's
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life


In conclusion
, promotions are one of the biggest drives for
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people
to apply themselves and
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get
more advantages in his life.
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Also
the best factors influence is getting more
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benefits
in his/her
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hard
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working
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humour
as
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well
. That's why promotions give to
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people
's soul better and competitive nature. If they win, they
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get
promoted and
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get
other
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benefits
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes
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IELTS essay Getting promotions is one of the biggest drives for people to apply themselves and work hard in the modern workplace. Why do you think people are so driven to get promotion? What other factors influence people to work hard? v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
301 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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