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Genetic engineering is an important issue in society today. Some people think that it will improve people’s lives in many ways. Others feel that it may be a threat to life on earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.6

Genetic engineering is an important issue in society today. Some people think that it will improve people’s lives in many ways. Others feel that it may be a threat to life on earth. v. 6
Scientists now have the capacity of revealing the secrets of gene codes, and have advanced genetic engineering to new levels that will bring huge benefits. Meanwhile, some people fear that these advances may well lead to global catastrophes. So, there are two camps of thought which I will now discuss further and offer give my own viewpoint. Those in favour technology, claim the application of genetic technology will bring help to the whole of society, in people have cared about for thousands of years. For example, people have been seeking an effective way to extend their lifespans from the Qin dynasty in China to the present day. Therefore, with the development of genetic studies, living forever may no longer be a dream for humankind. Experiments and other relative research on insects have shown the possibility of extending life. In other fields, gene research is also playing an important role in changing people’s lives. For instance, promising transgenic applications have increased the supply of food, thus possibly ending starvation in some parts of the world. On the other side, objectors can not be persuaded by the positives. Present examples are difficult to explain, but previous experiments done some decades ago, the example of Dolly the sheep being apposite, did indicate that meddling with creating clones was not entirely safe. Those who oppose insist that geneticists are violating natural principles, and is cloning, which causes the greatest concern, and regard it as an unexpected threat to humans while believing it is also a serious ethical issue. In conclusion, we cannot deny what the both sides have valid points, but in my view, I think we should not consider the issue so extremely. As society develops, we face many tough choices. So, we cannot halt the exploration and application of new scientific discoveries, but we also need to caution against the consequences of misuse.
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some
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technology, claim the application of genetic technology will bring
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help
to the whole of society, in
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people
have cared about for thousands of years.
For example
,
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people
have been seeking an effective way to extend their lifespans from the Qin dynasty in China to the present day.
Therefore
, with the development of genetic studies, living forever may no longer be a dream for humankind. Experiments and other relative research on insects have shown the possibility of extending life. In other fields, gene research is
also
playing an
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important
role in changing
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people’s
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lives
.
For instance
, promising transgenic applications have increased the supply of food,
thus
possibly
ending starvation in
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some
parts of the world.

On the other side, objectors can not
be persuaded
by the positives. Present examples are difficult to
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explain
,
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previous experiments done
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decades ago, the example of Dolly the sheep being apposite, did indicate that meddling with creating clones was not
entirely
safe. Those who oppose insist that geneticists are violating natural principles, and is cloning, which causes the greatest concern, and regard it as an unexpected threat to humans while believing it is
also
a serious ethical issue.

In conclusion
, we cannot deny what the both sides have valid points,
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but
in my view, I
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think
we should not consider the issue
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so
extremely
. As society develops, we face
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many
tough choices.
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, we cannot halt the exploration and application of new scientific discoveries,
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but
we
also
need to caution against the consequences of misuse.
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IELTS essay Genetic engineering is an important issue in society today. Some people think that it will improve people’s lives in many ways. Others feel that it may be a threat to life on earth. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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