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Some people believe that cooking at home is a waste of time. They feel it is better to buy fast food which is more convenient and less stressful in modern life. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and examples from your own experience v.1

Some people believe that cooking at home is a waste of time. They feel it is better to buy fast food which is more convenient and less stressful in modern life. Give your opinion and examples from your own experience v. 1
In today's life, many people struggle to find time to cook food at home due to their busy schedule. Some people say cooking meal at family is not necessary and buying at fast food centres would be more comfortable and stress-free. I do not agree with this statement, as the advantages of cooking at home outweigh the advantages of buying outside. To start with, food prepared at home do not have much impact on family members' health conditions as those will be taken into consideration while cooking. Parents, especially mothers, will be interested to cook food for their children. They feel this is one of the ways to express love and affection and thus creating a strong bonding in the family. Additionally, it creates an opportunity for children in families, to learn cooking, particularly traditional dishes. For example, a survey conducted in India, in the last year, indicates 80 percent of people learnt cooking from their parents at home. Although, buying food from fast food outlets is more convenient and stress-free, it has major impacts on one's health. People who eat, regularly, fast foods such as burgers, pizza, french fries, might develop serious health problems in the long term. For example, a study conducted by the National Medical College, indicates 70 percent of people suffering from diabetes and heart problems, are fast food eaters. Moreover, this leads to decreased productivity of the society in-turn affecting the economy. To conclude, I opine that the meal should be prepared in house. To live healthy and contribute more to the economy, people should avoid eating fast food and plan some time to prepare it at home.
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struggle to find time to cook
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food
at home due to their busy schedule.
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people
say cooking meal at
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is not necessary and buying at
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food
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would be more comfortable and
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-free. I do not
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agree
with this statement, as the advantages of cooking at home outweigh the advantages of buying outside.

To
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start
with,
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food
prepared at home do not have much impact on
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family
members' health conditions as those will
be taken
into consideration while cooking. Parents,
especially
mothers, will
be interested
to cook
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food
for their children. They feel this is one of the ways to express
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love
and affection and
thus
creating a strong bonding in the
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family
.
Additionally
, it creates an opportunity for children in
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families
, to learn cooking,
particularly
traditional dishes.
For example
, a survey conducted in India, in the last year, indicates 80 percent of
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people
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learnt
cooking from their parents at home.

Although, buying
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from
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fast
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outlets is more convenient and
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-free, it has major impacts on one's health.
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People
who eat,
regularly
,
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fast
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foods
such as burgers, pizza, french fries, might develop serious health problems in the long term.
For example
, a study conducted by the National Medical College, indicates 70 percent of
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people
suffering from diabetes and heart problems, are
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fast
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food
eaters.
Moreover
, this leads to decreased productivity of the society in-turn affecting the economy.

To conclude
, I opine that the meal should
be prepared
in
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house
. To
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live
healthy and contribute more to the economy,
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people
should avoid eating
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fast
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food
and plan
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some
time to prepare it at home.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people believe that cooking at home is a waste of time. They feel it is better to buy fast food which is more convenient and less stressful in modern life. Give your opinion and examples from your own experience v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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