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Developed countries have created many environmental problems. What can be done to reduce the dangers of global warming? v.10

Developed countries have created many environmental problems. What can be done to reduce the dangers of global warming? v. 10
A lot of environmental problems we face now is as a result of activities in developing countries. Even though, some of These environmental problems can be controlled while others can be eliminated. Their effects cannot be overstated on human and plant life. A popular environmental problem is global warming, and with all problems, it comes with some dangers as well. One of the steps that can be taken to reduce the dangers of global warming is the use of renewable energy. For example, use of solar and rechargeable energy sources. This will help reduce the amount of carbon dioxide being emitted into the atmosphere. Unfortunately, when the gas is released to the open in excess, it reacts with the ozone layer and may lead to depletion of the ozone layer. A lot of effort has been put into the manufacturing of electric cars, as emission from cars contributes a large percentage of the carbon dioxide being released to the atmosphere. Although, the prices of these cars are still on the high side, but as manufacturing costs begin to reduce, they will become more affordable for the average population. Carbon emission also comes from industrial or heavy duty machines. However, These emissions can be converted into an energy source and consequently reused by the machines. Another step that can be taken to reduce the dangers of global warming is to encourage the planting of trees. For instance, using tree planting awareness. Deforestation should be accompanied with afforestation. Because humans breathe in oxygen and breathe out carbon dioxide, plants take this in for their use. Therefore, more plants means more carbon dioxide will be taken from the atmosphere and vice versa. To summarize, the dangers of global warming cannot be over emphasized. Therefore, more focus should be placed on reducing carbon dioxide emission. With this, the dangers can be greatly reduced to a large extent.
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environmental
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problems
we face
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now
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developing countries
.
Even though
,
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some
of These environmental
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problems
can
be controlled
while others can
be eliminated
. Their effects cannot
be overstated
on human and plant life. A popular environmental
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problem
is
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global
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warming
, and with all
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problems
, it
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comes
with
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some
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dangers
as well
.

One of the steps that can
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to
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reduce
the
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dangers
of
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global
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warming
is the
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use
of renewable energy.
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,
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use
of solar and rechargeable energy sources. This will
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help
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reduce
the amount of
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carbon
dioxide
being emitted
into the atmosphere. Unfortunately, when the gas
is released
to the open in excess, it reacts with the ozone layer and may lead to depletion of the ozone layer.
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A lot of
effort has
been put
into the manufacturing of electric cars, as
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emission
from cars contributes a large percentage of the
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carbon
dioxide
being released
to the atmosphere. Although, the prices of these cars are
still
on the high side,
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but
as manufacturing costs
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begin
to
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reduce
, they will become more affordable for the average population.
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Carbon
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emission
also
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comes
from industrial or
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heavy duty
machines.
However
, These
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emissions
can
be converted
into an energy source and
consequently
reused by the machines.

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be taken
to
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reduce
the
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dangers
of
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global
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warming
is to encourage the planting of trees.
For instance
, using tree planting awareness. Deforestation should be
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accompanied with
afforestation.
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Because
humans breathe in oxygen and breathe out
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carbon
dioxide, plants take this in for their
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use
.
Therefore
, more plants means more
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carbon
dioxide will
be taken
from the atmosphere and vice versa.

To summarize
, the
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dangers
of
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global
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warming
cannot be over emphasized.
Therefore
, more focus should
be placed
on reducing
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carbon
dioxide
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emission
. With this, the
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dangers
can be
greatly
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reduced
to a large extent.
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IELTS essay Developed countries have created many environmental problems. What can be done to reduce the dangers of global warming? v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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