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Fossil fuels(e. g. coal, oil, natural gas) are the main sources of energy in many countries, but in some countries the use of alternative sources of energy is encouraged. Is it a positive or negative effect? v.1

Fossil fuels(e. g. coal, oil, natural gas) are the main sources of energy in many countries, but in some countries the use of alternative sources of energy is encouraged. Is it a positive or negative effect? v. 1
In recent times, people are more aware of the need to have multiple sources of income, flexible and diversified career. The previous idea of having and focusing one career doggedly is slowly ebbing out and becoming a thing of the past. Also, it should be noted that continuous personal and professional development should continue throughout one's lifetime and not be limited to a period or age. This essay would discuss the importance of having various streams of earnings, career and advance development of oneself. Firstly, the high cost of living has necessitated the need for different sources of earning money and professions. Over the years, the standard of living in most countries of the world has gradually been on the increased and is relatively high, therefore, depending on just one revenue is not enough. For a few years now, a number of countries went through recession and this comes with its rippling effect which are but not limited to these; inflation, increase in unemployment, collapse of businesses especially small and medium businesses and so on. During this period, the buying power of people reduces drastically, and those who have multiple turnovers manage to stay afloat. Secondly, some of these careers are seasonal. Some jobs exist for a season or period, after which the need for those jobs fade. During this period, retrenchment and layoffs are the order of the day, which in turn leaves quite a number of people in the cold with little or no hope. For instance, the use and need for fuel better known as non-renewable energy is gradually reducing especially in developed countries, these countries now rely on renewable sources for energy generation and so on. This shift has further resulted in a decrease of job availability for petroleum engineers leaving so many without jobs. Therefore, having several professions help in the easy switch of positions. Moving on to continuing education, engaging in self and professional development has eased migration. The reward of continuous education may not be immediate, but the overall benefit in the long run cannot be quantified. Studies have shown that those who engage in advanced training are more marketable and employable, this further creates chances for them around the world. These individuals are constantly in touch with the latest trends and information which in turn gives them an edge over their peers. For example, there was a story of a young woman that was recently published on the website of World Education Services (WES). It was told that this lady of Iranian descent who majored in Computer Science developed various flexible skills which facilitated her migration into Canada and further into the WES organization where she is currently working. To conclude, for one to maintain a healthy and comfortable lifestyle in the world we currently live in a world where several careers and sources of income is necessary. Also, continuous education makes one remain relevant and sound. The cost of these personal developments cannot be compared to the overall future benefits.
In recent times,
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people
are more aware of the
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need
to have multiple
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sources
of income, flexible and diversified
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career
. The previous
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idea
of having and focusing one
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career
doggedly
is
slowly
ebbing out and becoming a thing of the past.
Also
, it should
be noted
that continuous personal and professional
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development
should continue throughout one's lifetime and not
be limited
to a
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period
or age. This essay would discuss the importance of having various streams of earnings,
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career
and advance
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development
of oneself.

Firstly
, the high cost of living has necessitated the
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need
for
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different
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sources
of earning money and professions. Over the years, the standard of living in most
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countries
of the
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world
has
gradually
been on the increased and is
relatively
high,
therefore
, depending on
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just
one revenue is not
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enough
. For a few years
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now
, a number of
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countries
went through recession and this
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comes
with its rippling effect which are
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but
not limited to these; inflation, increase in unemployment, collapse of businesses
especially
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small
and medium businesses and
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so
on. During this
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period
, the buying power of
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people
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reduces
drastically
, and those who have multiple turnovers manage to stay afloat.

Secondly
,
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some
of these
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careers
are seasonal.
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Some
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jobs
exist for a season or
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period
, after which the
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need
for those
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jobs
fade. During this
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period
, retrenchment and layoffs are the order of the day, which in turn
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leaves
quite a number of
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people
in the
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cold
with
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little
or no hope.
For instance
, the
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use
and
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need
for fuel better known as non-renewable energy is
gradually
reducing
especially
in developed
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countries
, these
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countries
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now
rely on renewable
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sources
for energy generation and
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so
on. This shift has
further
resulted in a decrease of
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job
availability for petroleum engineers leaving
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so
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many
without
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jobs
.
Therefore
, having several professions
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help
in the easy switch of positions.

Moving on to continuing
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education
, engaging in self and professional
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development
has
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eased
migration. The reward of continuous
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education
may not be immediate,
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but
the
overall
benefit in the long run cannot
be quantified
. Studies have shown that those who engage in advanced training are more marketable and employable, this
further
creates chances for them around the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
. These individuals are
constantly
in touch with the latest trends and information which in turn gives them an edge over their peers.
For example
, there was a story of a young woman that was recently published on the website of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
World
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Education
Services (
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WES
). It was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
that this lady of Iranian descent who majored in Computer Science developed various flexible
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
which facilitated her migration into Canada and
further
into the
Possible spelling mistake found.
WES
organization where she is
currently
working.

To conclude
, for one to maintain a healthy and comfortable lifestyle in the
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world
we
currently
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
world
where several
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careers
and
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sources
of income is necessary.
Also
, continuous
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education
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
one remain relevant and sound. The cost of these personal
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developments
cannot
be compared
to the
overall
future benefits.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Fossil fuels(e. g. coal, oil, natural gas) are the main sources of energy in many countries, but in some countries the use of alternative sources of energy is encouraged. Is it a positive or negative effect? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
499 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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