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Fossil fuels, such as coal, oil and natural gas, are used in many countries. The use of alternative sources of energy, including wind and solar power, is encouraged. Is this trend is a positive or negative development? v.3

Fossil fuels, such as coal, oil and natural gas, are used in many countries. The use of alternative sources of energy, including wind and solar power, is encouraged. Is this trend is a positive or negative development? v. 3
Nowadays, many countries have seen the rising popularity of applying alternative resources, like wind and solar energy. In my opinion, this exerts a positive impact on human life and the environment. Analyzing its considerable advantages and comparing them to those of fossil fuel will show this. First, alternative resources assist countries with ensuring energy security. In fact, nations have anticipated problem about the energy supply in the future. Indeed, fossil fuel like coal, oil and natural gas, formed by an accumulation over thousands of years, have a limitation and will run out despite people’s great demand on energy. Hence, alternative resource, which is renewable and unlimited, can be a potential measure against this challenge. Furthermore, thanks to their balanced distribution, wind or solar power facilitates exploiting limitless in every country. This helps nations having lack of natural resources reduce fossil fuel imported from others. In other words, the ability to serve infinitely, preventing countries from relying on others is the major strength making alternative resources become trendy today. Last but not least, it is needed to point out renewable energy’s advantages to protect the environment and human life. Specifically, using them does not emit a huge amount of harmful gases, carcinogen substances, or volatile organic compounds, which are produced by those of fossil fuel, as we see in countries like China or India. As a result, local people are less likely to suffer from disease or syndromes diminishing their health. To sum up, renewable resources should be encourage more strongly because of its pluses to be exploited infinitely and protect the community against many health risks. It is not only an ideal choice but also a proactive measure that countries need to take, aiming to tackle pending environmental problems.
Nowadays,
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have
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seen
the rising popularity of applying
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alternative
resources, like wind and solar
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energy
. In my opinion, this exerts a
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positive
impact on human life and the environment. Analyzing its considerable advantages and comparing them to those of
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fossil
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fuel
will
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show
this.

First
,
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alternative
resources assist
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countries
with ensuring
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energy
security. In fact, nations have anticipated problem about the
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energy
supply in the future.
Indeed
,
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fossil
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fuel
like coal, oil and natural gas, formed by an accumulation over thousands of years, have a limitation and will run out despite
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people
’s great demand on
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energy
.
Hence
,
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alternative
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resource
, which is renewable and unlimited, can be a potential measure against this challenge.
Furthermore
, thanks to their balanced distribution, wind or solar power facilitates exploiting limitless in every
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country
. This
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helps
nations having lack of natural resources
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reduce
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fossil
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fuel
imported from others.
In other words
, the ability to serve
infinitely
, preventing
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countries
from relying on others is the major strength making
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alternative
resources become trendy
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today
.

Last
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but
not least, it
is needed
to point out renewable
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energy’s
advantages to protect the environment and human life.
Specifically
, using them does not emit a huge amount of harmful gases, carcinogen substances, or volatile organic compounds, which
are produced
by those of
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fossil
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fuel
, as we
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see
in
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countries
like China or India.
As a result
, local
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people
are less likely to suffer from disease or syndromes diminishing their health.

To sum up, renewable resources should be
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encourage
more
strongly
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because
of its pluses to
be exploited
infinitely
and protect the community against
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many
health
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risks
. It is not
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only
an ideal choice
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but
also
a proactive measure that
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countries
need to take, aiming to tackle pending environmental problems.
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IELTS essay Fossil fuels, such as coal, oil and natural gas, are used in many countries. The use of alternative sources of energy, including wind and solar power, is encouraged. Is this trend is a positive or negative development? v. 3

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  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
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