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Fossil fuels (coal, oil, natural gas) are the main source in many countries, but in some countries the use of alternative source of energy (wind and solar energy) are encouraged. To what extent do you think it is a positive or negative development? v.1

Fossil fuels (coal, oil, natural gas) are the main source in many countries, but in some countries the use of alternative source of energy (wind and solar energy) are encouraged. v. 1
It is true that the uses of conventional energy like coal, oil and natural gases have been incredibly soaring across the world. On the other hand, some countries are trying to adopt an alternative source of energy which in my opinion is a positive development since it is pollution-free and cheap. The great benefit of using green energy power is pollution-free. It is to say that solar energy and the wind turbine is produced by sun, wind and water, so it does not emit hazardous pollutant into the air which causes global warming, unlike the use of fossil fuel. Most European countries like Finland and Denmark have been gradually shifting from non-renewable energy to renewable energy. For instance, a recent study by the BBC news revealed that these countries are in the top list of the eco-friendly countries due to using cars on battery and their use cycles for commuting. Adopting an alternative source like solar and wind is beneficial because it is profound cheap in production. As the installation of such energy does not require many funds for the installation, many countries are dependent on other nations to supply fossil fuels. As a result, using green energy such countries will be independent and can produce energy in-house with just low funds. For example, in Bangladesh, which is the smallest country now producing solar energy with 750MW without relying on another nation. In conclusion, although utilization of fossil fuels is expeditiously accelerating, I think eco-friendly energy like solar and wind source have countless benefits such as they are not costly and do not cripple the environment, hence, they should be encouraged.
It is true that the
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uses
of conventional
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energy
like coal, oil and natural gases have been
incredibly
soaring across the world.
On the other hand
,
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some
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countries
are trying to adopt an alternative source of
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energy
which in my opinion is a
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positive
development since it is pollution-free and
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cheap
.

The great benefit of using green
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energy
power is pollution-free. It is to say that
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solar
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energy
and the
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wind
turbine
is produced
by sun,
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wind
and water,
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so
it does not emit hazardous pollutant into the air which causes global warming, unlike the
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use
of fossil fuel. Most European
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countries
like Finland and Denmark have been
gradually
shifting from non-renewable
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energy
to renewable
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energy
.
For instance
, a recent study by the BBC news revealed that these
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countries
are in the top list of the eco-friendly
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countries
due to using cars on battery and their
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use
cycles for commuting.

Adopting an alternative source like
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solar
and
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wind
is beneficial
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because
it is profound
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cheap
in production. As the installation of such
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energy
does not require
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many
funds for the installation,
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many
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countries
are dependent on other nations to supply fossil fuels.
As a result
, using green
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energy
such
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countries
will be independent and can produce
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energy
in-
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house
with
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just
low funds.
For example
, in Bangladesh, which is the smallest
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country
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now
producing
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solar
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energy
with 750MW without relying on another nation.

In conclusion
, although utilization of fossil fuels is
expeditiously
accelerating, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
eco-friendly
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energy
like
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solar
and
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wind
source have countless benefits such as they are not costly and do not cripple the environment,
hence
, they should
be encouraged
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Fossil fuels (coal, oil, natural gas) are the main source in many countries, but in some countries the use of alternative source of energy (wind and solar energy) are encouraged. v. 1

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  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6.5
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