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Fossil fuels (Coal, oil and natural gas) are the main source in many countries. However, in some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy (wind or solar energy) are encouraged. Do you think that it is positive or negative development? v.1

Fossil fuels (Coal, oil and natural gas) are the main source in many countries. However, in some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy (wind or solar energy) are encouraged. Do you think that it is positive or negative development? v. 1
In recent years usage of public libraries for technological media has become increasingly popular. Most of them feel that libraries are providing too much emphasis on hi-tech media and they feel it's not necessary. This essay will argue why supporting these media is entirely justified despite some issues. Few people argue that libraries should be exclusively used only for providing the books. They claim that the idea of libraries is to create a platform for a variety of books which are otherwise not found elsewhere. They also feel that some purposes of libraries like creating interest on books and improving book reading habits are diluted. Recently, there has been criticism from local societies on spending too much amount and space for computers and other media as they are available outside. These arguments made people to think that public libraries are used only for providing the books. Despite the above mentioned issues, the idea of providing a platform and spending resources for technological media is completely necessary. As in recent years the internet and other electronic devices are widely used to gather information quickly and visual media like videos are useful to grasp the information in an effective and efficient way. They also provide the latest information and updates on every aspect from various sources. Many students utilize these resources for exam and job preparations which are otherwise difficult to find. Overall, the usage of library resources for hi-tech media should be encouraged extensively. This essay argued that people who are against usage of library resources and space for hi-tech media have a flawed understanding of technology. In my opinion, latest technological devices should be utilized for better functioning of libraries despite the minor issues involved.
In recent
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years
usage of public libraries for technological
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
has become
increasingly
popular. Most of them feel that libraries are providing too much emphasis on hi-tech
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
media and
they feel it's not necessary. This essay will argue why supporting these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
is
entirely
justified despite
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
issues.

Few
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
argue that libraries should be exclusively
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
for providing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
. They claim that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of libraries is to create a platform for a variety of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
which are
otherwise
not found elsewhere. They
also
feel that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
purposes of libraries like creating interest on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
and improving
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
reading habits
are diluted
. Recently, there has been criticism from local societies on spending too much amount and space for computers and other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
as they are available outside. These arguments made
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that public libraries are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
for providing the books.

Despite the above mentioned issues, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of providing a platform and spending resources for technological
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
is completely necessary. As in recent years the internet and other electronic devices are
widely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to gather information
quickly
and visual
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
like videos are useful to grasp the information in an effective and efficient way. They
also
provide the latest information and updates on every aspect from various sources.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
students utilize these resources for exam and job preparations which are
otherwise
difficult to find.
Overall
, the usage of library resources for hi-tech
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
should
be encouraged
extensively
.

This essay argued that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who are against usage of library resources and space for hi-tech
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
have a flawed understanding of technology. In my opinion,
A determiner is probably missing here: "the latest".
latest
technological devices should
be utilized
for better functioning of libraries despite the minor issues involved.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Fossil fuels (Coal, oil and natural gas) are the main source in many countries. However, in some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy (wind or solar energy) are encouraged. Do you think that it is positive or negative development? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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