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In some cultures the old age is more valued while in some cultures the youth is more valued discuss both view and give your opinion v.1

In some cultures the old age is more valued while in some cultures the youth is more valued 1
It is considered that the elder people is extremely significant in some cultures while in few tradition the youngster is more valuable I believe that both are equally important because individuals learn more moral and ethical value to their elders however youngster always provide modern culture information for their society analysing the former view elder people play crucial role in some tradition first and foremost is individuals obtained knowledge about their culture as well as history to their senior citizen due to the fact that new contemporary Era duels all gave Prati to work ok but with the help of elders they acquire information about their earliest time period and and learn another moral value II prominent factor in same phenomena is integers always leave their children towards the right path because older people have profound knowledge and experience how face the of struggle in life they mostly give wonderful advice for their children and solve their children problem easily eventually entropy per beings Potter for their children which always appreciate their children and provide brilliant advice with easily sort problems considering the letter view youth is extremely because youngster provide information of currtet culture as well as contemporary lifestyle presently youth is more qualified andexperience more about galaxies as well as universe two instance today young sister 2 high level education and search a new things which change a people living lifestyle and currently youngster are more adventures and increase crazing which which search are lot of things such as automatic machines which change was totally lifestyles as well as inventions different sort of gadgets as a result today youngster are more knowledgeable and they have pletra knowledge about culthre to sum up youth and old age people both are important for culture because to yours learn moral ethical value for their senior citizen however with the help of youth divisible search are different sort of things and which is more beneficial for today life living
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is considered
that the
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people
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is
extremely
significant in
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some
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cultures
while in
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the
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youngster
is more valuable I believe that both are
equally
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important
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because
individuals learn more moral and ethical value to their
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elders
however
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youngster
always provide modern
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culture
information for their society
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analysing
the former view
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elder
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people
play crucial role in
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some
tradition
first
and foremost is individuals obtained knowledge about their
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culture
as
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well
as history to their senior citizen due to the fact that new contemporary Era duels all gave
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Prati
to work ok
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but
with the
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help
of
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elders
they acquire information about their earliest time period
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and and
learn another moral value II prominent factor in same phenomena is integers always
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leave
their
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children
towards the right path
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because
older
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people
have profound knowledge and experience how face the of struggle in life they
mostly
give wonderful advice for their
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children
and solve their
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children
problem
easily
eventually
entropy per beings Potter for their
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children
which always appreciate their
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children
and provide brilliant advice with
easily
sort problems considering the letter view
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youth
is
extremely
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because
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youngster
provide information of
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currtet
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culture
as
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well
as contemporary lifestyle
presently
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youth
is more qualified
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andexperience
more about galaxies as
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well
as universe two instance
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today
young sister 2 high level education and search a new
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things
which
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change
a
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people
living lifestyle and
currently
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youngster
are more adventures and increase crazing
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which which
search are
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lot of
things such as automatic machines which
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change
was
totally
lifestyles as
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well
as inventions
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different
sort of gadgets
as a result
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today
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youngster
are more
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knowledgeable and
they have
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pletra
knowledge about
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culthre
to sum up
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youth
and
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old
age
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people
both are
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important
for
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culture
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because
to yours learn moral ethical value for their senior citizen
however
with the
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help
of
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youth
divisible search are
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different
sort of things and which is more beneficial for
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today
life living
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes

IELTS essay In some cultures the old age is more valued while in some cultures the youth is more valued 1

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
326 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
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