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Some people think it is better to choose friends who always have the same opinion as them. Other people believe it is good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both view and give your own opinion. v.4

Some people think it is better to choose friends who always have the same opinion as them. Other people believe it is good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. v. 4
Despite the fact that some people believe in having pals who always support you, I should say sometimes true friends whose idea is different from yours will have a huge impact. In this essay, I am going to shed some light on both views and also give my own opinion. Firstly, friends is such an influential part of each and every human being. Indeed, we all need to have someone beside our family and partner who listen to our stories and give us advice. Moreover, one of the most essential part of having friends is that she or he is someone you have chosen to be part of your life, the one who you love and care as much as they do. Vividly, some people want to be supported unconditionally, no matter if they are right or not. These people will want to be friends with persons who always accept what they say or do. Unfortunately, I myself had plenty of acquaintances who were always trying to be supportive to get to be my friends, for example. On the flip side, there is another group of people who want their friend to be honest with them. In addition to this, this group is willing to find the best way which not only can benefit them but also help them to improve their relationship. Also, in my own opinion, friends who sometimes disagree with you have much more merit. The one who always, do not promote you wants you to be a better person and they put so much effort to show you the good and bad in every situation. In my own experience, for instance, I try to choose my friends by the way they want me to be happy and try to dedicate everything right, not the one who always agree no matter if I got hurt. In conclusion, all friends have their value. However, some people would not believe that the one whose way of thinking is different will benefit them.
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believe in having pals
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always support you, I should say
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friends
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idea
is
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different
from yours will have a huge impact. In this essay, I am going to shed
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some
light on both views and
also
give my
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own
opinion.

Firstly
,
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friends
is such an influential part of each and every human being.
Indeed
, we all need to have someone beside our family and partner
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who
listen to our stories and give us advice.
Moreover
, one of the most essential part of having
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friends
is that she or he is someone you have chosen to be part of your life, the one
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who
you
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love
and care as much as they do.
Vividly
,
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some
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people
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want
to
be supported
unconditionally
, no matter if they are right or not. These
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people
will
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want
to be
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friends
with persons
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always accept what they say or do. Unfortunately, I myself had
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plenty
of acquaintances
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who
were always trying to be supportive to
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to be my
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friends
,
for example
.

On the flip side, there is another group of
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people
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who
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want
their
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friend
to be honest with them.
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to this, this group is willing to find the best way which not
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only
can benefit them
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also
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help
them to
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improve
their relationship.
Also
, in my
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opinion,
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friends
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sometimes
disagree with you have much more merit. The one
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always, do not promote you
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wants
you to be a better
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person and
they put
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much effort to
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show
you the
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good
and
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bad
in every situation. In my
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own
experience,
for instance
, I try to choose my
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friends
by the way they
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want
me to be happy and try to dedicate everything right, not the one
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who
always
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agree
no matter if I
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got
hurt.

In conclusion
, all
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have their value.
However
,
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some
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people
would not believe that the one whose way of thinking is
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different
will benefit them.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think it is better to choose friends who always have the same opinion as them. Other people believe it is good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
333 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
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