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Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.19

Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. with this opinion? v. 19
It has been a long time that countries all over the world are improving their tourism industry to boost their economy. So they are attracting foreign travellers to come and see their cultural and historical attractions. However, the implementation of additional payment to them more than the local tourists is unacceptable. This argument will be proven by looking at how improper this is because local government has subsidisation already and excursionists from other countries have made contributions already. For one, imposing more charge to foreign visitors is objectionable because the local state has already subsidised its cultural tourism improvement. For instance, one of the new 7 wonders of nature in the world, the Puerto Princesa Underground River which is situated in Palawan, Philippines has been improved a lot through the help of not only the local administration of the province but also our national government. So all they have to do is to encourage more foreign tourists to come and see the place. Therefore, there is no need for them to pay extra fees to see the beautiful cultural heritage of our country. In addition to this, travellers from other countries have contributed too much money already when they visit a certain country. For example, the Philippine Ninoy Aquino International Airport (NAIA) is collecting 1500 pesos as a travel tax for every foreign excursionist, an equivalent of 50 USD. This is actually a lot of contributions collected by the Philippine government from them. Thus, it is very undesirable to charge them more for improving the countries historical attractions. In conclusion, it is disagreeable for the state of the Philippines to collect more fees from visitors of other nations due to the fact that it has subsidised its cultural and historical attractions and collecting airport tax already from them. So collecting more fees from these people is highly not recommended.
It has been a long time that
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countries
all over the world are improving their tourism industry to boost their economy.
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So
they are attracting
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foreign
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travellers
to
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come
and
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see
their
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cultural
and historical attractions.
However
, the implementation of additional payment to them more than the
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local
tourists is unacceptable. This argument will
be proven
by looking at how improper this is
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because
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local
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government
has
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subsidisation
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already
and excursionists from other
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countries
have made contributions already.

For one, imposing more charge to
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foreign
visitors is objectionable
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because
the
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local
state has
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already
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subsidised
its
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cultural
tourism improvement.
For instance
, one of the new 7 wonders of nature in the world, the Puerto
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Princesa
Underground River which
is situated
in
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Palawan
, Philippines has been
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improved
a lot through the
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help
of not
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only
the
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local
administration of the province
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but
also
our national
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government
.
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So
all they
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have to
do is to encourage more
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foreign
tourists to
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come
and
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see
the place.
Therefore
, there is no need for them to pay extra fees to
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see
the
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beautiful
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cultural
heritage of our country.

In addition
to this,
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travellers
from other
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countries
have contributed too much money
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already
when they visit a certain
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country
.
For example
, the Philippine
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Ninoy
Aquino International Airport (
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NAIA
) is collecting 1500 pesos as a travel tax for every
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foreign
excursionist, an equivalent of 50 USD. This is actually
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a lot of
contributions collected by the Philippine
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government
from them.
Thus
, it is
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very
undesirable to charge them more for improving the
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countries
historical attractions.

In conclusion
, it is disagreeable for the state of the Philippines to collect more fees from visitors of other nations due to the fact that it has
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subsidised
its
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cultural
and historical attractions and collecting airport tax
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already
from them.
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So
collecting more fees from these
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people
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is
highly
not recommended.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. with this opinion? v. 19

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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