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Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.18

Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. with this opinion? v. 18
Some people think that tourists should pay more money to visit cultural and historical places than local residents. I do not agree with this motion. In my opinion, local people and tourists should pay the same fee to visit museums and historical places. Firstly, if the government increases ticket price for tourists, the number of tourists who visit the country can decrease. As a result, this situation affects the country's economy badly. Moreover, cultural and historical places symbolise a country's characteristics. Therefore, they are advertised for countries. If the figure of tourists declines the opportunities for adverts local restaurants and places will also get reduced. It is also bad for countries' economy. If more money is taken from the international tourists than the local visitors, the foreigners would feel discriminated and this might lead to dissatisfaction among them. Secondly, ticket price can be equal both for the local people and tourists because both of them have a right to visit cultural and historical places equally. To separate visitors in terms of their nationality is not a good sense and in my opinion unfair. Some countries are notorious for unfair ticket fees such as Turkey and Greece. For example, Topkapı palace is a very popular historical place in Turkey. It is visited by hundreds of thousands of people every year. It is very famous all over the world. However, according to the news, which I have read it recently, the number of foreign visitors is decreasing due to high ticket fees in Turkey. The price for tourists is four times higher than for local visitors in some museums in Turkey. Hence, many tourism agents criticise governments because of this. In conclusion, in my view, tourists and local visitors should pay the same money to visit cultural and historical places. To increase ticket price for tourists in cultural and historical places does not enhance tourism income. By contrast, it can decrease it. Furthermore, I would argue that both local visitors and tourists have an equal right to visit cultural and historical places.
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people
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think
that
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tourists
should pay more money to
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visit
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cultural
and
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historical
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places
than
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local
residents. I do not
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agree
with this motion. In my opinion,
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local
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people
and
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tourists
should pay the same fee to
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visit
museums and
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historical
places.

Firstly
, if the
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government
increases
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ticket
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price
for
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tourists
, the number of
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tourists
who
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visit
the country can decrease.
As a result
, this situation affects the country's economy
badly
.
Moreover
,
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cultural
and
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historical
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places
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symbolise
a country's characteristics.
Therefore
, they
are advertised
for countries. If the figure of
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tourists
declines the opportunities for adverts
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local
restaurants and
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places
will
also
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get
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reduced
. It is
also
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bad
for countries' economy. If more money
is taken
from the international
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tourists
than the
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local
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visitors
, the foreigners would feel discriminated and this might lead to dissatisfaction among them.

Secondly
,
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ticket
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price
can be equal both for the
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local
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people
and
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tourists
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because
both of them have a right to
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visit
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cultural
and
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historical
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places
equally
. To separate
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visitors
in terms of their nationality is not a
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good
sense and in my opinion unfair.
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Some
countries are notorious for unfair
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ticket
fees such as Turkey and Greece.
For example
,
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Topkapı
palace is a
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very
popular
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historical
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place
in Turkey. It
is visited
by hundreds of thousands of
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people
every year. It is
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very
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famous
all over the world.
However
, according to the news, which I have read it recently, the number of foreign
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visitors
is decreasing due to high
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ticket
fees in Turkey. The
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price
for
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tourists
is four times higher than for
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local
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visitors
in
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some
museums in Turkey.
Hence
,
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many
tourism agents
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criticise
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governments
because of this
.

In conclusion
, in my view,
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tourists
and
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local
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visitors
should pay the same money to
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visit
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cultural
and
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historical
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places
. To increase
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ticket
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price
for
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tourists
in
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cultural
and
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historical
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places
does not enhance tourism income. By contrast, it can decrease it.
Furthermore
, I would argue that both
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local
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visitors
and
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tourists
have an equal right to
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visit
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cultural
and
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historical
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places
.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
66Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. with this opinion? v. 18

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
340 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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