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Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.16

Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. with this opinion? v. 16
It is sometimes seen that tourist attractions, including museums, important historical sites and prominent monuments, impose a higher fee for the overseas travellers than the local people. I do not agree with this idea and believe that the charges should be exactly the same. From a perspective, it might seem logical to charge foreign tourists more to enter a traditional and historical place as most of those monuments and establishments are state-owned and the government fund those from the tax they collect from the local residences. From this regard, many feel that local residences are already paying a portion of the ticket money through the tax they pay to the government. However, this is a very narrow view and this arrangement dissatisfies the visiting tourists as many of them find it discriminatory. From a broader view, if more foreign travellers are encouraged to visit nationally important tourist attractions and important historical and cultural place, this would bring more foreign tourists and this would ensure more earning from the tourism sector. Furthermore, it would help spread the national and cultural importance around the world. From this perspective, collecting some extra money from the entrance ticket is a shortsighted step. Furthermore, happy tourists encourage their immediate friends and family members to visit a country and some tourist attractions. If those tourists get the impression that they are being changed more money than the local people, they would psychologically feel unhappy and would share their dissatisfaction with others which would mean less foreign tourists. Many shrine and monuments are maintained by the ticket money it collects and if the number of visiting travelers get decreased, it would be tough for the authority to maintain those important places. From this perspective, having an equal entrance fee has a better impact. To conclude, from a broader perspective having the same ticket fee, both for the residence and foreign tourists, to allow the entrance to any nationally and historically important place including museums, art exhibitions, parks and historical places is more beneficial and I completely agree that the fee should not be different.
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that
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tourist
attractions, including museums,
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important
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historical
sites and prominent monuments, impose a higher
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fee
for the overseas
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travellers
than the
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local
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people
. I do not
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agree
with this
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idea
and believe that the charges should be exactly the same.

From a
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perspective
, it might seem logical to charge
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foreign
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tourists
more to enter a traditional and
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historical
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place
as most of those monuments and establishments are state-
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owned
and the
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government
fund those from the tax they collect from the
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local
residences. From this regard,
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many feel
that
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local
residences are already paying a portion of the
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ticket
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money
through the tax they pay to the
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government
.
However
, this is a
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very
narrow view and this arrangement dissatisfies the visiting
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tourists
as
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many
of them find it discriminatory. From a broader view, if more
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foreign
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travellers
are encouraged
to visit
nationally
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important
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tourist
attractions and
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important
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historical
and cultural
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place
, this would bring more
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foreign
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tourists
and this would ensure more earning from the tourism sector.
Furthermore
, it would
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help
spread the national and cultural importance around the world. From this
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perspective
, collecting
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some
extra
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money
from the entrance
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ticket
is a shortsighted step.

Furthermore
, happy
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tourists
encourage their immediate friends and family members to visit a country and
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some
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tourist
attractions. If those
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tourists
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get
the impression that they are being
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changed
more
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money
than the
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local
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people
, they would
psychologically
feel unhappy and would share their dissatisfaction with others which would mean less
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foreign
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tourists
.
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Many
shrine and monuments
are maintained
by the
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ticket
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money
it collects and if the number of visiting travelers
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get
decreased, it would be tough for the authority to maintain those
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important
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places
. From this
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perspective
, having an equal entrance
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fee
has a better impact.

To conclude
, from a broader
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perspective
having the same
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ticket
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fee
, both for the residence and
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foreign
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tourists
, to
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allow
the entrance to any
nationally
and
historically
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important
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place
including museums, art exhibitions, parks and
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historical
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places
is more beneficial and I completely
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agree
that the
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fee
should not be
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different
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
49Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. with this opinion? v. 16

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
347 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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