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For most people, when they get their first job they have little Idea whether or not they will remain in the same organisation through out their working life If they decided to change, they need to consider how this will impact on their career overall. v.1

For most people, when they get their first job they have little Idea whether or not they will remain in the same organisation through out their working life If they decided to change, they need to consider how this will impact on their career overall. v. 1
Yearly, Thousands of metric tonnes of pollutants are released by human activities, causing both environmental and health challenges. Fortunately, this problem can be solved. This essay will elucidate on the reason for the increased levels of pollution and proffer a solution to this issue In detail, pollution is increasing because of the rise in uncensored activities that released pollutants. Many countries lack laws that guide the release of harmful substances into the atmosphere, hence, these pollutants are released in large quantities. For example, in countries in Africa, no fixed regulations have been stipulated to curb pollution, therefore pollution levels are on the rise causing deleterious health effects. For this reason, contamination of the environment by harmful substances is on the rise. Although, polluting the surrounding is a menace to the world, a solution to this problem exists. This issue can be resolved if laws are put in place guiding the release of contaminants into the air. It is of utmost importance that there should be rules guiding the release of substances that harm the environment. Laws should be created and adhered to, with punishments for offenders. To illustrate in China, there are legislations concerning where industries that could be a source of contaminants, should be sited. Punishments are meted out to those who break the rules. In conclusion, the rise in the amount of pollution is because regulations have not been put in place and enforced. If, laws are put in placed with strict measures to discipline offenders, there would be a drastic drop in the release of environmental contaminants.
Yearly, Thousands of metric tonnes of pollutants
are released
by human activities, causing both environmental and health challenges.
Fortunately
, this problem can
be solved
. This essay will elucidate on the reason for the increased levels of
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pollution
and proffer a solution to this
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issue


In detail,
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pollution
is increasing
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because
of the rise in uncensored activities that released pollutants.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
countries lack
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laws
that guide the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
release
of harmful substances into the atmosphere,
hence
, these pollutants
are released
in large quantities.
For example
, in countries in Africa, no
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fixed
regulations have
been stipulated
to curb
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
,
therefore
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
levels are on the rise causing deleterious health effects.
For this reason
, contamination of the environment by harmful substances is on the rise.

Although, polluting the surrounding is a menace to the world, a solution to this problem exists. This issue can
be resolved
if
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laws
are put
in place guiding the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
release
of contaminants into the air. It is of utmost importance that there should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
guiding the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
release
of substances that harm the environment.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Laws
should
be created
and adhered to, with punishments for offenders. To illustrate in China, there are
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legislations
concerning where industries that could be a source of contaminants, should
be sited
. Punishments
are meted
out to those who break the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
.

In conclusion
, the rise in the amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pollution
is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
regulations have not
been put
in place and enforced. If,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laws
are put
in placed with strict measures to discipline offenders, there would be a drastic drop in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
release
of environmental contaminants.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay For most people, when they get their first job they have little Idea whether or not they will remain in the same organisation through out their working life If they decided to change, they need to consider how this will impact on their career overall. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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