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For a long time art has been considered an essential part of all cultures in the world. However, nowadays people’s values have changed, and we tend to consider science, technology and business more important than arts. What do you think are the causes of v.1

For a long time art has been considered an essential part of all cultures in the world. However, nowadays people’s values have changed, and we tend to consider science, technology and business more important than arts. What do you think are the causes of v. 1
Undoubtedly, these days, it is often argued that people have to find a way either to avoid weather changes or to live in these horrible situations. I fully agree with this fact that although people can adapt themselves to climate changes, it is better to keep weather circumstances constant. In turn, this essay will discuss why preventing climate remodeling is better than finding a way of living in this situation. On the one hand, the more climate alters, the harder life becomes. That is to say that people gained the capability to adapt themselves to the present climate within the millions of years, thus they cannot live easily with increased temperature, which happened recently. As a strategy, people can plant trees to decrease global warming, which nowadays is being converted to a serious problem. For instance, in forest countries, several kinds of cancers such as breast, brain, chest and stem cell cancers are extremely rare. In my opinion, enhancement of tree cultivation can secure the survival of planet Earth. On the other hand, the more consumption of fossil fuels, the more changing climate. Some people declare that consumption of fossil fuels increase the atmospheric pollutants as well as the weather temperature causing several damages to the environment. Hence, for preventing climate changes, consumption of fossil fuels must be reduced. For example, in the recent decade that the weather temperature of the world became warmer by up to 2 oC, the rate of fires increased by up to 12%. I believe that consumption of fossil fuels must be reduced by humans to decreased atmospheric pollutants happens. To summarize, some people are of the opinion that modification of climate change can happen easily, while others are opposed to this view. I am sure that preventing climate changes is better than adopting to this situation and enhancement of trees cultivation and reduction of consuming fossil fuels can help people to avoid the climate changes.
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, these days, it is
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argued that
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people
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have to
find a way either to avoid
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weather
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changes
or to
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live
in these horrible situations. I
fully
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agree
with this fact that although
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people
can adapt themselves to
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climate
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changes
, it is better to
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keep
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weather
circumstances constant. In turn, this essay will discuss why preventing
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climate
remodeling is better than finding a way of living in this situation.

On the one hand, the more
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climate
alters, the harder life becomes.
That is
to say that
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people
gained the capability to adapt themselves to the present
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climate
within the millions of years,
thus
they cannot
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live
easily
with increased temperature, which happened recently. As a strategy,
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people
can plant trees to decrease global warming, which nowadays is
being converted
to a serious problem.
For instance
, in forest countries, several kinds of cancers such as breast, brain, chest and stem cell cancers are
extremely
rare. In my opinion, enhancement of tree cultivation can secure the survival of planet Earth.

On the other hand
, the more
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consumption
of
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fossil
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fuels
, the more changing
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climate
.
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Some
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people
declare that
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consumption
of
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fossil
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fuels
increase the atmospheric pollutants
as well
as the
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weather
temperature causing several damages to the environment.
Hence
, for preventing
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climate
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changes
,
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consumption
of
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fossil
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fuels
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must
be
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reduced
.
For example
, in the recent decade that the
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weather
temperature of the world became warmer by up to 2
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oC
, the rate of fires increased by up to 12%. I believe that
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consumption
of
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fossil
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fuels
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must
be
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reduced
by humans to decreased atmospheric pollutants happens.

To summarize
,
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some
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people
are of the opinion that modification of
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climate
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change
can happen
easily
, while others
are opposed
to this view. I am sure that preventing
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climate
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changes
is better than adopting to this situation and enhancement of trees cultivation and reduction of consuming
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fossil
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fuels
can
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help
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people
to avoid the
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climate
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changes
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay For a long time art has been considered an essential part of all cultures in the world. However, nowadays people’s values have changed, and we tend to consider science, technology and business more important than arts. What do you think are the causes of v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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