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First impressions are important. Some people think that doing well in interviews is the key to securing the position. To what extent do you agree? v.3

First impressions are important. Some people think that doing well in interviews is the key to securing the position. v. 3
Nowadays, in cut-throat competitive world corporate industries are hiring multi talented employees who can represent them globally. There are many people who believe that an interviewee qualifies for a job not only because he has relevant degrees or experience but it is the first impression. I agree that body language and manners do play a major role in creating an influence over the interviewer. To begin with, body language portrays how optimistic a person is if hired to work on the company’s role. This is because straight shoulders and eye contact states that a person has confidence in his abilities, will cope-up with the work building stress and still have a good rapport with his colleagues. For instance, in a survey conducted by a job portal site named Monster. com got the highest votes from the human resource that they would prefer to hire an employee with a positive approach over extra degrees. As a result, employers are willing to arrange additional trainings to the new joiner to include them quickly in the flock for potential results. Furthermore, an interviewee dressing style and etiquettes displays professionalism and suitability to present company on the global platform. The reason for this is that in today’s world a company has clients present all over the world. Hence, when an employee travels to client’s office their behavioural presentation will either land a company with a potential customer or lose a business deal irrespective of the fact from where or for how many years they have studied in university. As a consequence, company has to analyse very sharply about the credibility’s of an employee before hiring. To conclude, due to globalization and marketing company profile a employee has to take into account the optimistic nature and presentation skill of the new joiner over the candidate with degrees
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cut
-throat competitive world corporate industries are hiring multi talented
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employees
who can represent them globally. There are
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many
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people
who believe that an interviewee qualifies for a job not
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only
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because
he has relevant degrees or experience
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but
it is the
first
impression. I
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agree
that body language and manners do play a major role in creating an influence
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over
the interviewer.

To
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begin
with, body language portrays how optimistic a person is if hired to work on the
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company’s
role. This is
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because
straight shoulders and eye contact states that a person has confidence in his abilities, will cope-up with the work building
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stress
and
still
have a
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good
rapport with his colleagues.
For instance
, in a survey conducted by a job portal site named Monster.
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com
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got
the highest votes from the human resource that they would prefer to hire an
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employee
with a
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positive
approach
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over
extra degrees.
As a result
, employers are willing to arrange additional trainings to the new joiner to include them
quickly
in the flock for potential results.

Furthermore
, an interviewee dressing style and
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etiquettes
displays professionalism and suitability to present
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company
on the global platform.
The reason for this is
that in
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today
’s world a
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company
has clients present all
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over
the world.
Hence
, when an
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employee
travels to client’s office their
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behavioural
presentation will either land a
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company
with a potential customer or lose a business deal irrespective of the fact from where or for how
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many
years they have studied in university. As a consequence,
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company
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has to
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analyse
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very
sharply
about the credibility’s of an
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employee
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before
hiring.

To conclude
, due to globalization and marketing
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company
profile
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a
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employee
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has to
take into account the optimistic nature and presentation
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skill
of the new joiner
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over
the candidate with degrees
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay First impressions are important. Some people think that doing well in interviews is the key to securing the position. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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