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Feedback and evaluation are necessary aspects of school and work, but many people dislike being evaluated. What are the causes of this problem? How could it be solved? v.3

Feedback and evaluation are necessary aspects of school and work, but many people dislike being evaluated. What are the causes of this problem? How could it be solved? v. 3
Nowadays, many companies and schools have feedback and an evaluation system to evaluate performance. However, some people at workplace hate this kind of approach. Even children at schools dislike being evaluated based on theory or practical exam. This essay will outline the main causes of this problem and its possible solutions. There are two reasons for this problem. First, whenever some people at work are being evaluated, they have the fear of dismissal. They think that if they get less rating based on the evaluation, they will be fired from the company. Children also do not take it in a positive way to get examined. They believe that if they score fewer marks, they will be scolded by teachers and parents, and this will be an insult of them among friends. Secondly, partiality takes place in every field. Employees who get along with their managers or students who are favourite with teachers acquire more ratings. Some possible solutions to this problem are impartial review and positive attitude of an individual. By doing a 360-degree review of a company can help people receive fair feedback. Moreover, feedback should be confidential. In a school also, grading or percentile system should be there instead of the percentage system. Marks of students should be secret. Students and people at work should understand that feedbacks and evaluations are part of life. One needs to get evaluated, so he can get to know the faults and can work on them. To Conclude, I will say that being evaluated is very important in life and both the person who evaluates or getting evaluated, should take it positively.
Nowadays,
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many
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companies
and schools have
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feedback
and an evaluation system to evaluate performance.
However
,
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some
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people
at workplace hate this kind of approach. Even children at schools dislike being
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evaluated
based on theory or practical exam. This essay will outline the main causes of this problem and its possible solutions.

There are two reasons for this problem.
First
, whenever
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some
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people
at work are being
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evaluated
, they have the fear of dismissal. They
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think
that if they
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get
less rating based on the evaluation, they will
be fired
from the
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company
. Children
also
do not take it in a
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positive
way to
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get
examined. They believe that if they score fewer marks, they will
be scolded
by teachers and parents, and this will be an insult of them among friends.
Secondly
, partiality takes place in every field. Employees who
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get
along with their managers or students who are
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favourite
with teachers acquire more ratings.

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Some
possible solutions to this problem are impartial review and
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positive
attitude of an individual. By doing a 360-degree review of a
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company
can
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help
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people
receive
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fair
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feedback
.
Moreover
,
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feedback
should be confidential. In a school
also
, grading or percentile system should be there
instead
of the percentage system. Marks of students should be secret. Students and
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people
at work should understand that
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feedbacks
and evaluations are part of life. One needs to
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get
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evaluated
,
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so
he can
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get
to know the faults and can work on them.

To Conclude
, I will say that being
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evaluated
is
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very
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important
in life and both the person who evaluates or getting
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evaluated
, should take it
positively
.
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IELTS essay Feedback and evaluation are necessary aspects of school and work, but many people dislike being evaluated. What are the causes of this problem? How could it be solved? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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