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Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. v.9

Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. v. 9
Fashion industries have no doubt revolutionised our dressing standards by making us look more stylish and versatile after wearing designer outfit. Wardrobes are more filled with brands than actually dressing needs of a person. People believe that we should not blindly follow the modern dressing style, rather we should wear what we like and which suits our personality and I fully adhere to it. This essay will analyse the demerits of following fashion trends. Firstly, fashion designs represent the creativity and innovation of a designer and it hides our own identity. It seems that we are showcasing their brand when we move in the society, be it shopping malls or social gatherings. Following modern style blindly takes away our uniqueness and tags us with brand names. Secondly, fashions trends are set to benefit industries more than to the consumer on the monetary base. People spend hundreds and thousands just to buy branded dresses that will make them look stylish in social gatherings. Designers rip their money on the sake of their creativity. Fashion trends also give rise to competition in the global market, which again benefits the industry. Finally, wearing latest design suits certainly makes us proud and our stylish look appeases the general public, but one should not forget that the basic purpose of wearing clothes is to protect ourselves from the climatic changes. For instance, we usually wear warm clothing in winters, if we wear designer's light fabric just to follow the trend we might fell ill. One should always wear comfortable outfits that shine their personality. We should not waste our money on buying latest designer's suits just because others are doing so. If this trend continues, it will give rise to competition which may take away our identities, cultural and traditional norms.
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Fashion
industries have no doubt
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revolutionised
our dressing standards by making us look more stylish and versatile after wearing designer outfit. Wardrobes are more filled with brands than actually dressing needs of a person.
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People
believe that we should not
blindly
follow the modern dressing style,
rather
we should
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wear
what we like and which suits our personality and I
fully
adhere to it. This essay will
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analyse
the demerits of following
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fashion
trends.

Firstly
,
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fashion
designs represent the creativity and innovation of a designer and it
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hides
our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
identity. It seems that we are showcasing their brand when we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
in the society, be it shopping malls or social gatherings. Following modern style
blindly
takes away our uniqueness and tags us with brand names.

Secondly
,
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fashions
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trends
are set
to benefit industries more than to the consumer on the monetary base.
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People
spend hundreds and thousands
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just
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
branded dresses that will
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make
them look stylish in social gatherings. Designers rip their money on the sake of their creativity.
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Fashion
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trends
also
give rise to competition in the global market, which again benefits the industry.

Finally
, wearing
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latest
design suits
certainly
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makes
us proud and our stylish look appeases the
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general public
,
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but
one should not forget that the basic purpose of wearing clothes is to protect ourselves from the climatic
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changes
.
For instance
, we
usually
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wear
warm clothing in winters, if we
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wear
designer's light fabric
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just
to follow the
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trend
we might
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fell
ill.

One should always
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wear
comfortable outfits that shine their personality. We should not waste our money on buying
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latest
designer's suits
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just
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because
others are doing
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so
. If this
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trend
continues, it will give rise to competition which may take away our identities, cultural and traditional norms.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. v. 9

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
296 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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