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Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. v.7

Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. v. 7
Clothes designers overwhelm us nowadays with quick changing fashion developments and new trends. It's commonly thought that the aim for fashion organisers is merely due to economic reasons. There are some groups in society who totally ignore these commercialised influences and insist on wearing what is convenient to them. In addition to the purpose of clothing to be practical and light to wear, it's quite a waste to follow seasonal modes. In this way, our choices are limited and we have to dispose of our unfashionable outfits. Instead of discarding those clothes we could keep them and combine them the next season. Among teens, clothes play a primary role in creating social establishments. Pupils chose to wear well-known brands with the negative consequences for those who can't afford to buy these. In my opinion, it's easier for both parents and youth to be obliged to wear a school uniform. Then students will be valued only according behaviour and not by their newest dress. Although I am convinced that clothing companies are interested in their bank account and use fashion as a way to attract potential buyers, for some it may be a rescue. Some people just don't have a notion for what fits together. They need a professional eye to advice them what to buy and what to wear. Maybe also in some circles society imposes on them what to wear. In summary, I think people should wear what they love and prefer. They should feel free to improvise and use their imagination. Society will be more vivid and gay if people wear what they like without certain boundaries pressing on them.
Clothes designers overwhelm us nowadays with quick changing fashion developments and new trends. It's
commonly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
that the aim for fashion
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organisers
is
merely
due to economic reasons. There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
groups in society who
totally
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ignore
these
Possible spelling mistake. 'commercialised' is British English.
commercialised
influences and insist on wearing what is convenient to them.
In addition
to the purpose of clothing to be practical and light to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wear
, it's quite a waste to follow seasonal modes. In this way, our choices are
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
limited and
we
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
dispose of our unfashionable outfits.
Instead
of discarding those clothes we could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
them and combine them the
next
season.

Among teens, clothes play a primary role in creating social establishments. Pupils chose to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wear
well-known brands with the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
consequences for those who can't afford to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
these. In my opinion, it's easier for both parents and youth to
be obliged
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wear
a school uniform. Then students will
be valued
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
according
Possible spelling mistake. 'behaviour' is British English.
behaviour
and not by their newest dress.

Although I
am convinced
that clothing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
are interested
in their bank account and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
fashion as a way to attract potential buyers, for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
it may be a rescue.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
don't have a notion for what fits together. They need a professional eye to advice them what to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
and what to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wear
. Maybe
also
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
Apostrophe might be missing. Did you mean "circles'" or "circle's"?
circles
society imposes on them what to wear.

In summary, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
should
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wear
what they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
and prefer. They should feel free to improvise and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
their imagination. Society will be more vivid and gay if
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
wear
what they like without certain boundaries pressing on them.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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