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Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. v.6

Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. v. 6
During the early days of civilisation, clothing was nothing more than a simple need of every human being. All they ever needed was a piece of clothing to cover and protect themselves from the harsh weather the Mother Nature had to offer. But times have changed. This simple need of man has transformed into a lucrative business, alluring people from all ages regardless of their gender or social status. The world of fashion has grown at an astonishing rate during the past couple of years. Companies such as Dolce & Gabbana, Levis, Tommy Hilfiger are some brands that have been dominating the market with fashion trends bringing in millions of dollars in revenue annually. Yet, there remains the question “Is this really worth it? ”. People pay an absurd amount of money to buy clothes which do not suit them nor do not make them feel comfortable. Yet, they purchase these for social status, prestige and bragging rights. In my honest opinion, I feel these fashion trends have brought in social discrimination among the young crowd. Kids with simple clothing feel inferior to those who look highly fashionable wearing branded clothing. I feel the old saying “Do not judge a book by its cover” no longer exists. People nowadays judge others by their clothes and fashion sense, and not for who they really are. Fashion is not something that should be followed blindly. It is just unnecessary and not a definite need of man. I and most of the others believe that people should wear clothes which make them feel comfortable. This is something which I regard is more important than fashion. I believe it is time for us to stop following the fashion herd and be ourselves. We should wear simple yet comfortable clothes and live our life with comfort at heart.
During the early days of
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civilisation
, clothing was nothing more than a
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simple
need of every human being. All they ever needed was a piece of clothing to cover and protect themselves from the harsh weather the Mother Nature had to offer.

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But
times have
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changed
. This
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simple
need of
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man
has transformed into a lucrative business, alluring
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people
from all ages regardless of their gender or social status.

The world of
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fashion
has grown at an astonishing rate during the past couple of years.
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Companies
such as Dolce & Gabbana, Levis, Tommy Hilfiger are
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some
brands that have been dominating the market with
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fashion
trends bringing in millions of dollars in revenue
annually
.
Yet
, there remains the question “Is this
really
worth it? ”.

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People
pay an absurd amount of money to
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buy
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clothes
which do not suit them nor do not
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make
them
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feel
comfortable.
Yet
, they
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purchase
these for social status, prestige and bragging rights. In my honest opinion, I
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feel
these
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fashion
trends have brought in social discrimination among the young crowd. Kids with
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simple
clothing
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feel
inferior to those who look
highly
fashionable wearing branded clothing.

I
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feel
the
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old
saying “Do not judge a book by its cover” no longer exists.
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People
nowadays judge others by their
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clothes
and
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fashion
sense, and not for
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who
they
really
are.
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Fashion
is not something that should
be followed
blindly
. It is
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just
unnecessary and not a
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definite
need of
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man
. I and most of the others believe that
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people
should wear
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clothes
which
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make
them
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feel
comfortable. This is something which I regard is more
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important
than fashion.

I believe it is time for us to
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stop
following the
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fashion
herd and be ourselves. We should wear
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simple
yet
comfortable
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clothes
and
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live
our life with comfort at heart.
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23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. v. 6

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
303 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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