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University education should be free to everyone, regardless of income. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.4

University education should be free to everyone, regardless of income. v. 4
It is believed by some people that the technology use today makes people more sociable, while others think that modern technology makes people less sociable. Although, technological advancement has offered many the opportunity to interact without distance barrier, I am of the view that it has reduced close interactions within our immediate environment. On the one hand, it is believed that the recent technological advancements allow people to interact with others outside their immediate surrounding. This is because people can now make friends and maintain relationships with individuals who are far from them through the use of the internet. For example, by means of social networks websites such as Facebook and Telegram, people can make friends online and keep in touch despite having distance barriers. As a result, some think that there are more opportunities to socialise due to recent technology. On the other hand, many people are addicted to technology, which prevents them from socializing with others around them. This occurs because with few exceptions, people are now preoccupied with watching movies on television, chatting online or playing music and video games rather than discussing at length with family members, making new friends or having face-to-face interactions with their neighbours. For instance, a recent study in Nigeria identified the use of modern technology as a major impediment to efforts geared towards making youths more friendly and interactive. Thus, modern technology has adversely affected interactions between people today. I agree with this viewpoint. In conclusion, while through the use of technology can make people socialize with others outside their surroundings, I am of the view that the addiction to technology has reduced the time available for people to interact with others in their environment. This has make people less sociable.
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use
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today
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makes
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more sociable, while others
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think
that modern
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technology
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makes
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people
less sociable. Although, technological advancement has offered
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many
the opportunity to interact without distance barrier, I am of the view that it has
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reduced
close interactions within our immediate environment.

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is believed
that the recent technological advancements
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allow
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people
to interact with others outside their immediate surrounding. This is
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because
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people
can
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now
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make
friends and maintain relationships with individuals who are far from them through the
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use
of the internet.
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, by means of social networks websites such as Facebook and Telegram,
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people
can
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make
friends online and
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keep
in touch despite having distance barriers.
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,
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some
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think
that there are more opportunities to
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socialise
due to recent technology.

On the
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other
hand,
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many
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people
are addicted
to
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technology
, which
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prevents
them from
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socializing
with others around them. This occurs
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with few exceptions,
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people
are
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preoccupied with watching movies on television, chatting online or playing music and video games
rather
than discussing at length with family members, making new friends or having face-to-face interactions with their
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neighbours
.
For instance
, a recent study in Nigeria identified the
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use
of modern
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technology
as a major impediment to efforts geared towards making youths more friendly and interactive.
Thus
, modern
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technology
has
adversely
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affected
interactions between
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people
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today
. I
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agree
with this viewpoint.

In conclusion
, while through the
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use
of
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technology
can
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make
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people
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socialize
with others outside their surroundings, I am of the view that the addiction to
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technology
has
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reduced
the time available for
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people
to interact with others in their environment. This has
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people
less sociable.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay University education should be free to everyone, regardless of income. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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